Re: [Secret] Éric Vyncke's No Objection on charter-ietf-tigress-00-01: (with COMMENT)

[Qin Wu <[e-mail]>]

Agree with Eric to use 3rd person, fixing this is easy, here is the proposed change:

OLD TEXT:

“

There are many situations in which it is desirable to transfer a copy of a

digital credential to another person. For example, you may want to provide

access to your vehicle to a friend or a family member. You may also want to

provide access to your home to your cat sitter. Or, you may want to transfer a

copy of a hotel key to your spouse. Today, no such standardized method exists

in a cross-platform, credential type-agnostic capacity.

”

NEW TEXT:

“

There are many situations in which it is desirable to transfer a copy of a

digital credential to another person. For example, Private car owners may want to provide

access to their vehicle to a friend or a family member. Private Home owners may want to

provide access to their home to their cat sitter. Or, Rental hotel room owners may want to transfer a

copy of a hotel key to their spouse. Today, no such standardized method exists

in a cross-platform, credential type-agnostic capacity.

”



Also I want to make sure I understand the meaning of ‘cross-platform’ word? Two understandings we can have:

1.        OS independent: Sender uses its mobile device with OS A to send credential, receiver uses its mobile device with OS B to receive credential from relay server.

2.        Platform independent: Separate credential provision from credential transfer, relay server is deployed in one platform, while credential authority is deployed in another platform.

I am wondering which one is correct?



-Qin

Re: [Secret] Éric Vyncke's No Objection on charter-ietf-tigress-00-01: (with COMMENT)

"Eric Vyncke (evyncke)" <[e-mail]> Wed, 29 June 2022 21:13 UTCShow header<https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/secret/0WWCaN8O4YYyAi_11w_boJFJcmw/>

Hello Roman,



Thank you for your reply and actions.



I agree that the 2nd person use in the charter is a matter of style, it is not mine but I do not mind at all as long as the secretive feline agrees with this wording.



Regards



-éric





On 29/06/2022, 19:47, "Roman Danyliw" <[e-mail]><mailto:&lt;[e-mail]&gt;> wrote:



    Hi Éric!



    Thank you for the feedback.  It has been folded into 00-02.  More inline ...



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    > Interesting pieces of work that will be quite useful. Here are some quick

    > comments:

    >

    > The 1st paragraph is written using "you", I would prefer to read it as the 3rd

    > person.



    I can see that, but I think this might be a matter of style.  Let's see what the community review returns.



    > 2nd paragraph, in "Note that neither private keys", the "note that" looks

    > strange in a charter, suggest to replace it by "Note: neither private keys".



    Changed.



    > The MD format (bullet list) is broken in a couple of places.



    I did my best by inserting too many CR to get bullets to break across lines.  I'm having issues with MD rendering the text to be bullets without line breaks.



    > It is unclear what "sensitive details of the share" are.

    >

    > The charter has privacy & security "goals" and "considerations", while I am not

    > a native English speaker, I wonder those 2 words are synonyms. Should

    > 'requirements' be used ?



    In this case, I would consider "goals", "considerations" and "requirements" synonyms.  However, there is no reason to use all three.  The text now only uses "goals"



    Roman