Re: [sfc] Shepherd Writeup - draft-ietf-sfc-proof-of-transit

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Hi Franck,

Please find below some quick comments, fwiw:

·         The abstract mentions UML but I don’t see which part of the document it is referring to.

·         Please add a statement in the core document to NMDA (RFC 8342)

·         Please add “yang-version 1.1;” right before the namespace line

·         Update this text:


OLD:

     import ietf-netconf-acm {

       prefix nacm;

     }


NEW:

     import ietf-netconf-acm {

       prefix nacm;

       reference

         "RFC 8341: Network Configuration Access Control Model";

     }



·         Make this modification:

OLD:

      revision "2020-09-08" {

       description

         "Addressing WGLC comments";

       reference

         "draft-ietf-sfc-proof-of-transit<https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-sfc-proof-of-transit>";

     }



     revision 2016-06-15 {

       description

         "Initial revision.";

       reference

         "draft-ietf-sfc-proof-of-transit<https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-sfc-proof-of-transit>";

     }

NEW:

      revision "2020-09-08" {

       description

         "Initial revision.";

       reference

         "RFC XXXX: Proof of Transit";

     }



·         You need to be more explicit about the nodes you are referring to in Section 7.10: “There are **a number of nodes** defined in this ...”

Cheers,
Med

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Objet : Re: [sfc] Shepherd Writeup - draft-ietf-sfc-proof-of-transit

Dear SFC WG chairs, Nagendra,

FYI - We’ve just posted https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft-ietf-sfc-proof-of-transit-07.txt which updates draft-ietf-sfc-proof-of-transit per the comments received during WGLC and from Nagendra as the document shepherd. Special thanks to Shwetha, who did the heavy lifting on this version update.

Cheers, Frank


From: Nagendra Kumar Nainar (naikumar) <[e-mail]<mailto:[e-mail]>>
Sent: Montag, 3. August 2020 14:52
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Subject: Shepherd Writeup - draft-ietf-sfc-proof-of-transit

Hi Authors,

Please find the shepherd writeup in the below link:

https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-sfc-proof-of-transit/shepherdwriteup/

The document is in good shape and addressing the WGLC comments and a couple of comments from my review should help us move forward.

Thanks,
Nagendra


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