[sfc] Martin Duke's No Objection on draft-ietf-sfc-nsh-integrity-06: (with COMMENT)

[Martin Duke via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

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COMMENT:
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Two nits:

Section 3 frequently uses the passive voice (“is instructed” “may be
instructed”) and that makes it hard to understand who is doing the instruction.
Please add subjects to at least the first of these sentences.

You frequently use the structure “allows to [verb]”. There are many ways to fix
this gramatically, but recommend simply deleting “allows to” and conjugating
the verb correctly.