Re: [sfc] Martin Duke's No Objection on draft-ietf-sfc-nsh-integrity-06: (with COMMENT)

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Hi Martin,

Thanks for the comments. 

Fixed the nits as you can see at: https://tinyurl.com/nsh-integrity-latest.

There are some few "instructed" in the text, but I prefer to leave the text as it is.  

Cheers,
Med

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> Two nits:
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> Section 3 frequently uses the passive voice (“is instructed” “may be
> instructed”) and that makes it hard to understand who is doing the
> instruction.
> Please add subjects to at least the first of these sentences.
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> You frequently use the structure “allows to [verb]”. There are many
> ways to fix this gramatically, but recommend simply deleting “allows
> to” and conjugating the verb correctly.
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