[Sidrops] AD Review of: draft-ietf-sidrops-rpki-has-no-identity

[Warren Kumari <[e-mail]>]

Hi there authors and WG,

Firstly, thank you very much for this document, and apologies it has taken
a while for me to review it.

I must admit that I *wanted* to / felt I should be able to use the RPKI to
do things like sign LOAs and similar "the RIR says I'm the 'owner', seem
mah cert!" type things, and so, even though the document makes me sad, it's
useful and needed.

I do have a number of editorial comments / nits. Addressing these
before IETF LC and IESG review should make progressing the document
easier and smoother, as well as being politer to the RFC Editor.

Please let me know LOUDLY once you'd had a chance to address them, and I'll
start IETF LC.

Issues / comments:
Sec 1:
O: "Though since, it has grown to include..."
C: I don't have suggested text, but "Though since" is difficult to
parse -- it's not clear from the prior sentence what the "though" or
"since" refer to. Perhaps "Since publication of [RFC6480], the term has
grown
to include ..."? Actually, I'm not really sure what the sentence was trying
to
say though, so I have no idea if my suggestion works...

Nits:
Sec 1:
O: "In security terms the phrase "Public Key"... "
P: "In security terms, the phrase "Public Key"  ..."
C: Comma.

O: "But in reality, the RPKI certificate is only an
   authorization to speak for for the explicitly identified INRs;"
P: "But in reality, the RPKI certificate is only an
   authorization to speak for the explicitly identified INRs;"
C: Repeated 'for'

Sec 2:
O: "Registries such as the Regional Internet Resistries (RIRs)"
P: "Registries such as the Regional Internet Registries (RIRs)"
C: Typo

O: "That the RPKI does not authenticate real world identity is a feature
   not a bug."
P: "That the RPKI does not authenticate real world identity is a feature,
   not a bug "
C: Comma


O: "Note that, if there is sufficient external, i.e. non-RPKI,
   verifcation of authority"
P: Note that, if there is sufficient external, i.e. non-RPKI,
   verification of authority"
C: Typo

Sec 4:
O: "When a document is signed with the private key associated with a RPKI
   certificate"
P: "When a document is signed with the private key associated with a RPKI
   certificate"
C: s/a/an/ - grammar

 Misc:
 s/real world/real-world/g -- I think?

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Again, I know that many of these are nits, but they'll have to be addressed
at some point, and before everyone reads it and gets riled up is best :-)

W


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Perhaps they really do strive for incomprehensibility in their specs.
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