Re: [Softwires] Last Call: <draft-ietf-softwire-yang-06.txt> (YANG Modules for IPv4-in-IPv6 Address plus Port Softwires) to Proposed Standard

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Hi Tom,

Thank you for the review. 

Please see inline. 

Cheers,
Med

> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : tom petch [mailto:[e-mail]]
> Envoyé : vendredi 28 septembre 2018 18:13
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> Objet : Re: Last Call: <draft-ietf-softwire-yang-06.txt> (YANG Modules for
> IPv4-in-IPv6 Address plus Port Softwires) to Proposed Standard
> 
> I believe that this I-D needs some admin-type changes to make it usable.
> 
> All three modules import some or all of
> 
> ietf-inet-types
> ietf-interfaces
> iana-if-type
> ietf-softwire-common
> 
> These imports should have YANG reference statements identifying the
> relevant RFC, probably
>   6991
>   8343
>   7244
>   XXXX

[Med] Added reference statements for those. 

> 
> and these need to be Normative References for the I-D; 8343 is, 6991 is
> not.
> 
> The first two modules have a sentence mentioning the use of RFC6991;
> this should mention all the modules referenced, those above and
> RFC7596
> RFC7597
> RFC7599:
> these last are already Normative References.  A similar sentence is
> needed for the third module for the RFC that it references.

[Med] Done. 

> 
> The third module is a bit light on references - I cannot see any!
> 
> There are three references to RFC XXX- I suspect that RFC XXXX is
> intended.
> 

[Med] Yes. 

> IANA Considerations references RFC7950 - this is a poor reference since
> all it says is 'Go look at RFC6020' which thus should be the reference
> here.

[Med] OK.

> 
> Security Considerations starts "The YANG module defined in this document
> ...
> Give us a clue - there are three of them:-)
> 
> Appendix A.  Configutation Examples
> 

[Med] Fixed. 

> Tom Petch
> 
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> >
> > The IESG has received a request from the Softwires WG (softwire) to
> consider
> > the following document: - 'YANG Modules for IPv4-in-IPv6 Address plus
> Port
> > Softwires'
> >   <draft-ietf-softwire-yang-06.txt> as Proposed Standard
> >
> > The IESG plans to make a decision in the next few weeks, and solicits
> final
> > comments on this action. Please send substantive comments to the
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> >
> > Abstract
> >
> >    This document defines YANG modules for the configuration and
> >    operation of IPv4-in-IPv6 softwire Border Relays and Customer
> >    Premises Equipment for the Lightweight 4over6, MAP-E, and MAP-T
> >    softwire mechanisms.
> >
> > Editorial Note (To be removed by RFC Editor)
> >
> >    Please update these statements within this document with the RFC
> >    number to be assigned to this document:
> >
> >    o  "This version of this YANG module is part of RFC XXXX;"
> >
> >    o  "RFC XXXX: YANG Modules for IPv4-in-IPv6 Address plus Port
> >       Softwires";
> >
> >    o  "reference: RFC XXXX"
> >
> >    Please update the "revision" date of the YANG module.
> >
> > The file can be obtained via
> > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-yang/
> >
> > IESG discussion can be tracked via
> > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-yang/ballot/
> >
> > No IPR declarations have been submitted directly on this I-D.