Re: [Softwires] Last Call: <draft-ietf-softwire-yang-06.txt> (YANG Modules for IPv4-in-IPv6 Address plus Port Softwires) to Proposed Standard

[tom petch <[e-mail]>]

I believe that this I-D needs some admin-type changes to make it usable.

All three modules import some or all of

ietf-inet-types
ietf-interfaces
iana-if-type
ietf-softwire-common

These imports should have YANG reference statements identifying the
relevant RFC, probably
  6991
  8343
  7244
  XXXX

and these need to be Normative References for the I-D; 8343 is, 6991 is
not.

The first two modules have a sentence mentioning the use of RFC6991;
this should mention all the modules referenced, those above and
RFC7596
RFC7597
RFC7599:
these last are already Normative References.  A similar sentence is
needed for the third module for the RFC that it references.

The third module is a bit light on references - I cannot see any!

There are three references to RFC XXX- I suspect that RFC XXXX is
intended.

IANA Considerations references RFC7950 - this is a poor reference since
all it says is 'Go look at RFC6020' which thus should be the reference
here.

Security Considerations starts "The YANG module defined in this document
...
Give us a clue - there are three of them:-)

Appendix A.  Configutation Examples

Tom Petch

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>
> The IESG has received a request from the Softwires WG (softwire) to
consider
> the following document: - 'YANG Modules for IPv4-in-IPv6 Address plus
Port
> Softwires'
>   <draft-ietf-softwire-yang-06.txt> as Proposed Standard
>
> The IESG plans to make a decision in the next few weeks, and solicits
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> Abstract
>
>    This document defines YANG modules for the configuration and
>    operation of IPv4-in-IPv6 softwire Border Relays and Customer
>    Premises Equipment for the Lightweight 4over6, MAP-E, and MAP-T
>    softwire mechanisms.
>
> Editorial Note (To be removed by RFC Editor)
>
>    Please update these statements within this document with the RFC
>    number to be assigned to this document:
>
>    o  "This version of this YANG module is part of RFC XXXX;"
>
>    o  "RFC XXXX: YANG Modules for IPv4-in-IPv6 Address plus Port
>       Softwires";
>
>    o  "reference: RFC XXXX"
>
>    Please update the "revision" date of the YANG module.
>
> The file can be obtained via
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-yang/
>
> IESG discussion can be tracked via
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-yang/ballot/
>
> No IPR declarations have been submitted directly on this I-D.