Re: [Softwires] Last Call: <draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang-14.txt> (A YANG Data Module for Dual-Stack Lite (DS-Lite)) to Proposed Standard

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Hi Tom,

FWIW, an updated version which takes into account your review is available online. 

The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang/ 

A diff from the previous version is available at:
https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang-15

Cheers,
Med

> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : [e-mail] [mailto:[e-mail]]
> Envoyé : mardi 20 février 2018 14:34
> À : tom p.
> Cc : [e-mail]; [e-mail]; softwire-
> [e-mail]; [e-mail]; [e-mail]; [e-mail]
> Objet : RE: Last Call: <draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang-14.txt> (A YANG Data
> Module for Dual-Stack Lite (DS-Lite)) to Proposed Standard
> 
> Hi Tom,
> 
> Thank you for the review and comments.
> 
> Please see inline.
> 
> Cheers,
> Med
> 
> > -----Message d'origine-----
> > De : tom p. [mailto:[e-mail]]
> > Envoyé : mardi 20 février 2018 12:07
> > À : [e-mail]
> > Cc : [e-mail]; [e-mail];
> softwire-
> > [e-mail]; [e-mail]; [e-mail]
> > Objet : Re: Last Call: <draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang-14.txt> (A YANG
> Data
> > Module for Dual-Stack Lite (DS-Lite)) to Proposed Standard
> >
> > Some minor, mostly administrative, details
> >
> > - The note to the RFC Editor asking them to replace XXXX is good.  I
> > suggest  another asking them to update the dates in the file and
> > revision clauses of the YANG module with the date of publication..
> 
> [Med] Fixed in my local copy.
> 
> >
> > - Copyright is 2017
> 
> [Med] Updated to 2018 in my local copy.
> 
> >
> > - the YANG module has six imports but no reference to where they can be
> > found.  I suggest adding a reference clause to each import, as in e.g.
> > draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model,
> 
> [Med] Happily. Done.
> 
> 
>  and, since the reference clause cannot
> > contain a XML style reference to the Reference section of the I-D, a
> > further mention of these I-D/RFC in the body of the I-D, again as in
> > e.g.
> > draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model
> 
> [Med] Given that almost all these pointers are already mentioned in the core
> text, I added only a sentence to refer to RFC7224.
> 
> >
> > - RFC7223 now has a bis version which I think you should use as it is
> > the NMDA version - this might affect your augments, I have not delved
> > into that yet.
> 
> [Med] Now that the 7223bis is in the RFC Editor queue, I updated the text.
> 
> >
> > - RFC5246 is being obsoleted and ... perhaps not:-)
> 
> [Med] Yeah, but RFC5246 is part of the recommended security text for YANG
> modules (https://trac.ietf.org/trac/ops/wiki/yang-security-guidelines).
> RFC5246 will be maintained till that reco is updated.
> 
> >
> > - RFC 6536 is being revised and will soon be in IETF Last Call
> 
> [Med] Actually, it will be published as RFC8341. I updated the text
> accordingly.
> 
> >
> > Tom Petch
> >
> > ----- Original Message -----
> > From: "The IESG" <[e-mail]>
> > Sent: Monday, February 12, 2018 2:28 PM
> >
> >
> > >
> > > The IESG has received a request from the Softwires WG (softwire) to
> > consider
> > > the following document: - 'A YANG Data Module for Dual-Stack Lite
> > (DS-Lite)'
> > >   <draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang-14.txt> as Proposed Standard
> > >
> > > The IESG plans to make a decision in the next few weeks, and solicits
> > final
> > > comments on this action. Please send substantive comments to the
> > > [e-mail] mailing lists by 2018-02-26. Exceptionally, comments may
> > be
> > > sent to [e-mail] instead. In either case, please retain the
> > beginning of
> > > the Subject line to allow automated sorting.
> > >
> > > Abstract
> > >
> > >
> > >    This document defines a YANG module for the DS-Lite Address Family
> > >    Transition Router (AFTR) and Basic Bridging BroadBand (B4)
> > elements.
> > >
> > > Editorial Note (To be removed by RFC Editor)
> > >
> > >    Please update these statements with the RFC number to be assigned
> > to
> > >    this document:
> > >
> > >    o  "This version of this YANG module is part of RFC XXXX;"
> > >
> > >    o  "RFC XXXX: A YANG Data Module for Dual-Stack Lite (DS-Lite)";
> > >
> > >    o  "reference: RFC XXXX"
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > > The file can be obtained via
> > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang/
> > >
> > > IESG discussion can be tracked via
> > >
> > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang/ballot/
> > >
> > >
> > > No IPR declarations have been submitted directly on this I-D.
> > >
> > >
> > > The document contains these normative downward references.
> > > See RFC 3967 for additional information:
> > >     draft-ietf-opsawg-nat-yang: A YANG Module for Network Address
> > Translation (NAT) (None - IETF stream)
> > >
> > >
> > >