Re: [Softwires] WGLC for draft-ietf-softwire-yang-04 as Standard Track, closed by 27 June 2018

Hi,

I’ve just posted v06 with the changes proposed below incorporated.

Thanks,
Ian

> On 29. Jun 2018, at 10:20, <mohamed.boucadair@orange.com> <mohamed.boucadair@orange.com> wrote:
> 
> Hi Ian,
>  
> Works for me. Thanks.
>  
> Cheers,
> Med
>  
> De : ianfarrer@gmx.com [mailto:ianfarrer@gmx.com] 
> Envoyé : vendredi 29 juin 2018 09:59
> À : BOUCADAIR Mohamed IMT/OLN; Sheng Jiang
> Cc : Softwires WG; softwire-chairs@ietf.org; Andy Wingo
> Objet : Re: [Softwires] WGLC for draft-ietf-softwire-yang-04 as Standard Track, closed by 27 June 2018
>  
> Hi Sheng /Med,
>  
> @Sheng, Thanks for the review.
> @Med, Thanks for the quick update.
>  
> A couple of other things:
>  
> There’s an outstanding comment on model element descriptions given as “…”. Proposed new text:
>  
> notification softwire-binding-instance-event description: "The ID of the binding-instance that generated the notification.";
>  
> leaf-list modified-entry description "The ID of the the binding-table entry that has been modified.";
>  
> ------
> I just did a quick read through of -05. There are a few small language cleanups that I would like to make:
>  
> Section 2.1
> s/Provides configuration and monitoring for softwire CE element/Provides configuration and monitoring for the softwire CE element/
>  
> s/Provides configuration and monitoring for softwire BR element/Provides configuration and monitoring for the softwire BR element/
>  
> Section 2.2
> s/be imported here, as needed/be imported, as needed/
>  
> ietf-softwire-ce:binding-entry/br-ipv6-addr
> description
> s/The IPv6 address for of the binding BR./The IPv6 address for the binding BR./
>  
> ietf-softwire-br:br-instances/algorithm
> description
> s/Indicate that the instance supports the MAP-E and MAP-T functions./Indicate that the instance supports the MAP-E and MAP-T functions./
>  
> If there’s no objection to the above changes, I’ll update and post later on today.
>  
> Cheers,
> Ian
> 
> 
> On 27. Jun 2018, at 10:54, mohamed.boucadair@orange.com <mailto:mohamed.boucadair@orange.com> wrote:
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> Hi Sheng,
>  
> Many thanks for the careful review.
>  
> An updated version which integrates your comments is available online:https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-yang/?include_text=1 <https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-yang/?include_text=1>
>  
> See more inline.
>  
> Cheers,
> Med
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