Re: [Softwires] Last Call: <draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang-14.txt> (A YANG Data Module for Dual-Stack Lite (DS-Lite)) to Proposed Standard

["tom p." <[e-mail]>]

Some minor, mostly administrative, details

- The note to the RFC Editor asking them to replace XXXX is good.  I
suggest  another asking them to update the dates in the file and
revision clauses of the YANG module with the date of publication..

- Copyright is 2017

- the YANG module has six imports but no reference to where they can be
found.  I suggest adding a reference clause to each import, as in e.g.
draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model, and, since the reference clause cannot
contain a XML style reference to the Reference section of the I-D, a
further mention of these I-D/RFC in the body of the I-D, again as in
e.g.
draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model

- RFC7223 now has a bis version which I think you should use as it is
the NMDA version - this might affect your augments, I have not delved
into that yet.

- RFC5246 is being obsoleted and ... perhaps not:-)

- RFC 6536 is being revised and will soon be in IETF Last Call

Tom Petch

----- Original Message -----
From: "The IESG" <[e-mail]>
Sent: Monday, February 12, 2018 2:28 PM


>
> The IESG has received a request from the Softwires WG (softwire) to
consider
> the following document: - 'A YANG Data Module for Dual-Stack Lite
(DS-Lite)'
>   <draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang-14.txt> as Proposed Standard
>
> The IESG plans to make a decision in the next few weeks, and solicits
final
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> Abstract
>
>
>    This document defines a YANG module for the DS-Lite Address Family
>    Transition Router (AFTR) and Basic Bridging BroadBand (B4)
elements.
>
> Editorial Note (To be removed by RFC Editor)
>
>    Please update these statements with the RFC number to be assigned
to
>    this document:
>
>    o  "This version of this YANG module is part of RFC XXXX;"
>
>    o  "RFC XXXX: A YANG Data Module for Dual-Stack Lite (DS-Lite)";
>
>    o  "reference: RFC XXXX"
>
>
>
>
> The file can be obtained via
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang/
>
> IESG discussion can be tracked via
>
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-yang/ballot/
>
>
> No IPR declarations have been submitted directly on this I-D.
>
>
> The document contains these normative downward references.
> See RFC 3967 for additional information:
>     draft-ietf-opsawg-nat-yang: A YANG Module for Network Address
Translation (NAT) (None - IETF stream)
>
>
>