Re: Chair review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-mef-uni-01.txt

"Adrian Farrel" <adrian@olddog.co.uk> Sun, 01 March 2009 19:17 UTC

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From: Adrian Farrel <adrian@olddog.co.uk>
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Subject: Re: Chair review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-mef-uni-01.txt
Date: Sun, 01 Mar 2009 19:17:50 -0000
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Thanks, Lou.

[SNIP]

>> Section 1
>>
>> Paragraph 1 doesn't seem sure how many frameworks there are.
>> Perhaps
>> OLD
>> [MEF6] and [G.8011] provide parallel frameworks
>> NEW
>> [MEF6] and [G.8011] provide parallel views of a framework
>
> humm, I think the original phrasing is more accurate.

Sorry, I wasn't clear.

The second sentence starts "The framework discusses ..."

Thus you need either my suggestion above, or to change to "The frameworks 
discuss ..."


All other changes look good, so we can pick this up when we have to take 
IETF/IESG comments.

Cheers,
Adrian