[stir] Éric Vyncke's No Objection on draft-ietf-stir-enhance-rfc8226-03: (with COMMENT)

[Éric Vyncke via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Éric Vyncke has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-stir-enhance-rfc8226-03: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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Thank you for the work put into this document.

Please find below some non-blocking COMMENT points (but replies would be
appreciated).

I hope that this helps to improve the document,

Regards,

-éric

== COMMENTS ==

-- Abstract --
"This document updates RFC 8226 to define an additional way that the JWT claims
can be constrained" at first sight, it is unclear whether the change adds a
constraints or present another set of constraints (may be it is being
non-ENglish native issue...) The introduction clarifies the ambiguity but the
abstract should stand alone.

-- Section 3 --
Suggest to be consistent with the use of double quotes in <to the iat, orig,
and dest claims.  The baseline PASSporT claims ("iat", "orig", and "dest")>.

-- Section 7 --
Wondering whether a reference to RFC4949 is required for "renewal".