Re: [stir] I-D Action: draft-ietf-stir-passport-rcd-18.txt

A few quick comments from review of the diff...

Section 1: It is a bit awkward to say, "This document furthermore documents ..."  How about: 

   In addition, Section 12 describes use-cases that enable
   external third-party authorities to convey rich information
   associated with a calling number via a "rcd" PASSporT
   while clearly identifying the third-party as the source of
   the Rich Call Data information.

Section 10.1 says:

   Compact form of an "rcd" PASSporT claim has some restrictions that
   will be enumerated below, but mainly follows standard PASSporT
   compact form procedures.  For SIP, re-construction of the "nam" claim
   the string for the display-name in the From header field.  

Something is missing from the second quoted sentence.  I cannot parse it.

Russ

> On Jul 8, 2022, at 11:02 AM, internet-drafts@ietf.org wrote:
> 
> 
> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories.
> This draft is a work item of the Secure Telephone Identity Revisited WG of the IETF.
> 
>        Title           : PASSporT Extension for Rich Call Data
>        Authors         : Chris Wendt
>                          Jon Peterson
>  Filename        : draft-ietf-stir-passport-rcd-18.txt
>  Pages           : 32
>  Date            : 2022-07-08
> 
> Abstract:
>   This document extends PASSporT, a token for conveying
>   cryptographically-signed call information about personal
>   communications, to include rich meta-data about a call and caller
>   that can be signed and integrity protected, transmitted, and
>   subsequently rendered to the called party.  This framework is
>   intended to include and extend caller and call specific information
>   beyond human-readable display name comparable to the "Caller ID"
>   function common on the telephone network and is also enhanced with a
>   integrity mechanism that is designed to protect the authoring and
>   transport of this information for different authoritative use-cases.
> 
> 
> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-stir-passport-rcd/
> 
> There is also an htmlized version available at:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-stir-passport-rcd-18
> 
> A diff from the previous version is available at:
> https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-stir-passport-rcd-18
> 
> 
> Internet-Drafts are also available by rsync at rsync.ietf.org::internet-drafts
> 
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