[stir] Benjamin Kaduk's No Objection on draft-ietf-stir-enhance-rfc8226-04: (with COMMENT)

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draft-ietf-stir-enhance-rfc8226-04: No Objection

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Thanks for the updates in the -04; they address all my comments well.

Just one editorial note on the new Section 6:

   On the other hand, if the situation does not call for mustExclude
   constraints, then either the EnhancedJWTClaimConstraints extension or
   the JWTClaimConstraints extension can express the constraints.  Until
   such time as the EnhancedJWTClaimConstraints become widely

For singular/plural match, I think "becomes" is better.
I'd also consuder "such time as support for the EnhancedJWTClaimConstraints
extension becomes widely implemented".

   implemented, the use of the JWTClaimConstraints extension may be more
   likely to be implemented.  This guess is based on the presumption

"use of ... may be more likely to be implemented" is an unusual construction.
I think "use of ... may be more likely to succeed" or "the [extension] may
be more likely to be implemented" would be more typical.

   that the first specified extension will be implemented more widely in
   the next few years.