[storm] Consolidated draft

"Knight, Frederick" <Frederick.Knight@netapp.com> Tue, 16 August 2011 04:22 UTC

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Here are a couple of minor comments on the consolidated draft:
 
1)      an observation in the abstract is the sentence:
 
The iSCSI protocol aims to be fully compliant with
  the standardized SCSI Architecture Model (SAM).
 
In fact, "SAM" is incorrect here.  SAM is not a generic name; SAM is the
name of the very first version of the SCSI Architecture Model.  In fact,
the original iSCSI was based on SAM-2, not SAM.  Maybe it should leave
out the use of a meaningful SCSI acronym (SAM) and just say:
 
The iSCSI protocol aims to be fully compliant with the standardized SCSI
Architecture.
 
2)      Last paragraph of abstract:
 
This document consolidates RFCs 3720, 3980, 4850 and 5048 into a
  single document and makes additional updates to the consolidated
  specification. This document also updates RFC 3721. The text in
  this document thus supersedes the text in RFCs 3720, 3721, 3980,
  4850 and 5048 whenever there is such a question.
 
The first sentence does not list 3721 as part of the consolidation, but
the last sentence says this document supersedes 3721.  It seems that in
order to supersede 3721, it must consolidate 3721 into this single
document.  The middle sentence ("This document also updates RFC3721.")
adds confusion.  Is it that just some of 3721 is consolidated, and other
parts are not consolidated, so in fact, only some of 3721 is superseded?
 
The last sentence is also missing something ... "The text in this
document supersedes the text in ... whenever there is such a question."
- what question?  Does this mean whenever there is a conflict?; or
whenever they disagree?; or whenever there is a difference?
 
                Fred