[Stox] Gen-ART review for draft-ietf-stox-core-07

"Romascanu, Dan (Dan)" <dromasca@avaya.com> Mon, 09 December 2013 17:11 UTC

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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-stox-core-07
Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
Review Date: 12/9/13
IETF LC End Date: 12/11/13
IESG Telechat date: 


Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

1. Please expand XSF at first occurrence
2. It would be good to find some other wording for 'This document inaugurates a series of SIP-XMPP interworking specifications'. For example 'This document provides information for a series of SIP-XMPP interworking specifications'