Re: [Stox] [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt

Brian E Carpenter <brian.e.carpenter@gmail.com> Wed, 04 March 2015 19:36 UTC

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> Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments 

Either spelling is correct (also true of judg[e]ment).

grep will tell you that more RFCs use acknowledgement than acknowledgment,
and more use judgment than judgement.

Regards
   Brian

On 05/03/2015 04:56, Francis Dupont wrote:
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
> < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>gt;.
> 
> Please wait for direction from your document shepherd
> or AD before posting a new version of the draft.
> 
> Document: draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20150226
> IETF LC End Date: 20150302
> IESG Telechat date: 20150305
> 
> Summary: Ready
> 
> Major issues: None
> 
> Minor issues: None
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
>  - ToC page 2 and Appendix A page 11: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
> 
>  - 1 page 2: even its meaning is obvious the abbrev IM is never
>   introduced.
> 
>  - 1 page 3: the word groupchat does not belong formerly to the
>   English language...
> 
>  - 4 page 5 (twice): acknowledgements -> acknowledgments
> 
>  - 8 page 8: signalling -> signaling
> 
>  - 11.2 page 10: the first informative reference is for a 2012 I-D.
> 
> Regards
> 
> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
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