[Stox] Alissa Cooper's No Objection on draft-ietf-stox-7248bis-13: (with COMMENT)

["Alissa Cooper" <[e-mail]>]

Alissa Cooper has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-stox-7248bis-13: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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Below is a small suggested edit for text in Section 9.2. I think the
normative "MUST honor data about ..." construction is vague.

OLD
Therefore, a gateway MUST honor data about
   the intended recipient of a presence notification (as represented by
   the 'to' address for XMPP and by the Request-URI for SIP) and it MUST
   NOT route or deliver a presence notification to any other entities,
   because it does not possess information about authorization to
   receive presence notifications for such entities - that information
   resides at the user's home service, not at the receiving gateway).

NEW
Therefore, a gateway MUST
   NOT route or deliver a presence notification to any entity other than
the intended recipient (as represented by
   the 'to' address for XMPP and by the Request-URI for SIP),
   because it does not possess information about authorization to
   receive presence notifications for such entities - that information
   resides at the user's home service, not at the receiving gateway).