Re: [Stox] WGLC for draft-ietf-stox-core-06

Philipp Hancke <fippo@goodadvice.pages.de> Thu, 17 October 2013 21:31 UTC

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Am 08.10.2013 12:35, schrieb Yana Stamcheva:
> The editors and the chairs believe that the following draft is now ready and hereby start a 2-week Working Group Last Call for:

Overall the document is looking good to me.

Nits:
- in section 1 it could abbreviate the XMPP Standards foundation as XSF
- section 3: "application specific connection managers" reminds me of
   the terminology used by the first jabberd server. Is that clear to
   everyone else?
- there is an extra whitespace before the opening parenthesis in the
   second paragraph of section 3. I'm also wondering if it would make
   sense to transform the parenthesised text into a Note:
- the most recent version of XEP 0106 is from June 2007, not May 2005 as 
stated in section 9.2