Re: [tao-discuss] First draft of new version

[Brian E Carpenter <[e-mail]>]

Niels,

Thanks. I made myself a side-by-side diff, so I've attached it for
anybody else's convenience.

A few comments, somewhat random:

> The current Areas and abbreviations are shown below (more information
> can be found here: https://www.ietf.org/topics/areas/).

I wonder about including the current list of Areas. They do change, and
apparently more often than the Tao changes. Maybe it would be better
just to include the pointer?

> Because the IESG has a great deal of influence on whether
> Internet-Drafts become RFCs, many people look at the ADs as somewhat
> godlike creatures. IETF participants sometimes reverently ask Area
> Directors for their opinion on a particular subject. However, most ADs
> are nearly indistinguishable from mere mortals and rarely speak from
> mountaintops. In fact, when asked for specific technical comments, the
> ADs may often defer to IETF participants whom they feel have more
> knowledge than they do on that topic.

I can see why you might not like the tone of this paragraph, but
I think it makes an important point, and should be rewritten rather
than deleted. Newcomers really need to understand that ADs are just
people.

> The RFC Editor edits, formats, and publishes Internet-Drafts as RFCs,
> working in conjunction with the IESG for IETF drafts, the IRTF Chair for
> IRTF drafts, the IAB for IAB drafts, and the Independent Submissions
> Editor for Independent Submission drafts, and of course the work with
> the author(s). An important secondary role is to provide one definitive
> repository for all RFCs 

Actually I don't think the repository role is secondary at all; it's
essential.

> The Sunday is an excellent day to join the meeting...

How about :

  If you are not attending the hackathon, Sunday is an excellent day to
join the meeting...


> It's worth noting that neither attendee names and addresses nor IETF
> mailing lists are ever offered for sale.

You've deleted that, but I think it should be replaced by a pointer
to the privacy policy that was just updated for GDPR.

> One of the most important (depending on your point of view) things the
> host does is provide unfethered Internet access for the meeting

If this is a reference to RFC 1149, there is a spelling mistake.

> , continental breakfast on Monday through Friday
> mornings (depending on the meeting venue),

Why delete that? It's still true.

Regards,
     Brian

Regards
   Brian Carpenter