Re: [tcpm] I-D Action: draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-04.txt
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Subject: Re: [tcpm] I-D Action: draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-04.txt
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For what it is worth, -06 with the mentioned changes has been published. The diff can be found at: https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-06.txt I hope that this update fixes all issues. Michael > -----Original Message----- > From: tcpm <tcpm-bounces@ietf.org> On Behalf Of Scharf, Michael > Sent: Tuesday, January 18, 2022 10:32 PM > To: mohamed.boucadair@orange.com > Cc: tcpm@ietf.org > Subject: Re: [tcpm] I-D Action: draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-04.txt > > Hi Med, > > Thanks a lot for this further review with good catches. > > We have addressed all comments in the current working copy for -06, except > for the disclaimer text regarding line wrap in B.1. This disclaimer is currently > automatically introduced by the build tools no matter whether it is needed. > That detail can be sorted out later by the RFC editor. > > Details can be found at the repository with the working copy: > https://github.com/mjethanandani/ietf-tcp > > Our suggestion is to change the TCP-AO example so that it illustrates the use > of send-id and recv-id with parameters documented in draft-ietf-tcpm-ao- > test-vectors. > > As the WGLC is ongoing, we would wait for further comments before > finalizing -06. > > Thanks > > Michael (as author) > > > > -----Original Message----- > > From: mohamed.boucadair@orange.com > > <mohamed.boucadair@orange.com> > > Sent: Monday, January 3, 2022 10:13 AM > > To: Scharf, Michael <Michael.Scharf@hs-esslingen.de> > > Cc: tcpm@ietf.org > > Subject: RE: [tcpm] I-D Action: draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-04.txt > > > > Hi Michael, > > > > The changes look good. Thank you. > > > > Please find below some comments on the new version: > > - Section 4 > > > > (1) > > OLD: > > reference > > "RFC XXXX, YANG Model for Transmission Control Protocol (TCP) > > Configuration."; > > > > NEW: > > reference > > "RFC XXXX: A YANG Model for Transmission Control Protocol (TCP) > > Configuration"; > > > > (2) > > > > Add "when set to true" in the description of almost all the Boolean nodes. > > > > (3) > > > > I still don't think "forms the connection identifier" is accurate. The > connection > > is identified by the 4-uple (which is captured in the key statement). You > may > > consider simply: s/forms the connection identifier/of the connection. > > Another better approach would be, e.g.: > > > > OLD: > > "Local address that forms the connection identifier."; > > NEW: > > "Identifies the address that is used locally by an endpoint to bind the > > connection."; > > > > OLD: > > "Remote address that forms the connection identifier."; > > NEW: > > "Identifies the address that is used by the peer endpoint to bind the > > connection."; > > > > etc. > > > > - Make this change in 5.2: s/registrations are requested/registration is > > requested > > - Update 5.2 to make it explicit that the module is not maintained by IANA: > > > > OLD: > > name: ietf-tcp > > namespace: urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-tcp > > prefix: tcp > > reference: RFC XXXX > > > > NEW: > > name: ietf-tcp > > namespace: urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-tcp > > prefix: tcp > > maintained by IANA: N > > reference: RFC XXXX > > > > - I think you can remove the note in B.1 > > - remove "\" right after "</description>" in B.2 > > - As you are referring to RFC 8792, you need to add the 8792 header to > > adhere with the following (B.2): > > > > ====== > > ... > > Text content that has been folded as specified by this strategy MUST > > adhere to the following structure. > > > > 7.1.1. Header > > > > The header is two lines long. > > > > The first line is the following 36-character string; this string MAY > > be surrounded by any number of printable characters. This first line > > cannot itself be folded. > > > > NOTE: '\' line wrapping per RFC 8792 > > > > The second line is an empty line, containing only the end-of-line > > character sequence. This line provides visual separation for > > readability. > > ===== > > > > - B.2: > > > > <!-- > > This example sets TCP-AO configuration parameters as > > demonstrated by examples in draft-touch-tcpm-ao-test-vectors. > > --> > > > > Not sure why this I-D is cited here given the example does not echo an > > example from that I-D (e.g., same local/remote port, local address, etc.). > > Also, I was expecting to see an example that illustrates the use of send-id > > and recv-id. > > > > If the citation is maintained, please make this change: > > > > s/demonstrated by examples in draft-touch-tcpm-ao-test- > > vectors/demonstrated by examples in I-D.ietf-tcpm-ao-test-vectors > > > > Cheers, > > Med > > > > > -----Message d'origine----- > > > De : Scharf, Michael <Michael.Scharf@hs-esslingen.de> > > > Envoyé : jeudi 30 décembre 2021 15:19 > > > À : BOUCADAIR Mohamed INNOV/NET > > <mohamed.boucadair@orange.com> > > > Cc : tcpm@ietf.org > > > Objet : RE: [tcpm] I-D Action: draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-04.txt > > > > > > Hi Med, > > > > > > Thanks a lot for the detailed review. I went through all your comments. > > > Most were straightforward to address. > > > > > > Our suggestion is to clearly state that MPTCP is outside the scope of this > > > model. MPTCP may need a different YANG model. Yet, the most obvious > > use > > > case of the YANG model are TCP-based control plane protocols on > routers > > > (BGP, LDP, ...). At least I am not aware of widespread use of BGP over > > > MPTCP. > > > > > > Can you please have a look at -05 and let me know if -05 works for you? > > > > > > The full diff is available at: https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft- > > > ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-05 > > > > > > Thanks > > > > > > Michael > > > > > > > -----Original Message----- > > > > From: mohamed.boucadair@orange.com > > > > <mohamed.boucadair@orange.com> > > > > Sent: Friday, November 12, 2021 11:17 AM > > > > To: Scharf, Michael <Michael.Scharf@hs-esslingen.de> > > > > Cc: tcpm@ietf.org > > > > Subject: RE: [tcpm] I-D Action: draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-04.txt > > > > > > > > Hi Michael, > > > > > > > > FWIW, please find below some comments to the latest version of the > > > draft: > > > > > > > > * pdf: https://raw.githubusercontent.com/boucadair/IETF-Drafts- > > > > Reviews/master/draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-04-rev%20Med.pdf > > > > * doc: https://github.com/boucadair/IETF-Drafts- > > > > Reviews/raw/master/draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-04-rev%20Med.doc > > > > > > > > I think that the document is almost stable. Thank you. > > > > > > > > Cheers, > > > > Med > > > > > > > > > -----Message d'origine----- > > > > > De : tcpm <tcpm-bounces@ietf.org> De la part de > > > > > internet-drafts@ietf.org Envoyé : lundi 25 octobre 2021 20:22 À : > > > > > i-d-announce@ietf.org Cc : tcpm@ietf.org Objet : [tcpm] I-D Action: > > > > > draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-04.txt > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts > > > > > directories. > > > > > This draft is a work item of the TCP Maintenance and Minor > > > > > Extensions WG of the IETF. > > > > > > > > > > Title : YANG Model for Transmission Control Protocol > > > > > (TCP) Configuration > > > > > Authors : Michael Scharf > > > > > Mahesh Jethanandani > > > > > Vishal Murgai > > > > > Filename : draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-04.txt > > > > > Pages : 23 > > > > > Date : 2021-10-25 > > > > > > > > > > Abstract: > > > > > This document specifies a minimal YANG model for TCP on devices > > > that > > > > > are configured by network management protocols. The YANG > model > > > > > defines a container for all TCP connections and groupings of > > > > > authentication parameters that can be imported and used in TCP > > > > > implementations or by other models that need to configure TCP > > > > > parameters. The model also includes basic TCP statistics. The > > > model > > > > > is NMDA (RFC 8342) compliant. > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is: > > > > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp/ > > > > > > > > > > There is also an htmlized version available at: > > > > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-04 > > > > > > > > > > A diff from the previous version is available at: > > > > > https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-tcpm-yang-tcp-04 > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > Internet-Drafts are also available by anonymous FTP at: > > > > > ftp://ftp.ietf.org/internet-drafts/ > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > _______________________________________________ > > > > > tcpm mailing list > > > > > tcpm@ietf.org > > > > > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/tcpm > > > > > > > > > > > __________________________________________________________ > > > > > > > __________________________________________________________ > > > > _____ > > > > > > > > Ce message et ses pieces jointes peuvent contenir des informations > > > > confidentielles ou privilegiees et ne doivent donc pas etre diffuses, > > > > exploites ou copies sans autorisation. 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