Re: [tcpm] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-tcpm-ao-test-vectors-05

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Subject: Re: [tcpm] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-tcpm-ao-test-vectors-05
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Hi, Peter,

Thank you for the review.

Most of these issues were addressed already in the -06 version.

Regarding “master key”:
	RFC 5925 uses the term as a two-word phrase, capitalized only at the beginning of sentences
	RFC 5926 uses the term Master_Key (note the underscore) as an algorithmic parameter

This doc uses the 5926 version and will be consistent to that. I have added a note in -07 (to be posted shortly) accordingly.

Joe

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> On Mar 1, 2022, at 7:44 AM, Lars Eggert <lars@eggert.org> wrote:
> 
> Peter, thank you for your review. I have entered a No Objection ballot for this document.
> 
> Lars
> 
> 
>> On 2022-1-30, at 23:25, Peter Yee via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> wrote:
>> 
>> Reviewer: Peter Yee
>> Review result: Ready with Nits
>> 
>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
>> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
>> by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just
>> like any other last call comments.
>> 
>> For more information, please see the FAQ at
>> 
>> <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
>> 
>> Document: draft-ietf-tcpm-ao-test-vectors-05
>> Reviewer: Peter Yee
>> Review Date: 2022-01-30
>> IETF LC End Date: 2022-02-01
>> IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
>> 
>> Summary: This document supplies test vectors for the MTI authentication
>> algorithms used in the TCP Authentication Option. There are a few nits that
>> should be corrected prior to publication. I'm not equipped to validate the test
>> vectors themselves and did not attempt to do so. [Ready with nits.]
>> 
>> Major issues: None
>> 
>> Minor issues: None
>> 
>> Nits/editorial comments:
>> 
>> Page 2, Abstract: move this entire section before the "Status of this Memo"
>> section, as required by RFC 7322, section 4.
>> 
>> Page 4, first full paragraph: move "[RFC6978]" after "experimental extension"
>> to avoid confusion.
>> 
>> Page 10, section 5, 1st paragraph: add a period at the end of the sentence.
>> 
>> Page 20, section 7, 1st sentence: add a period at the end of the sentence.
>> 
>> Page 24, section 8.2: add a comma after "e.g.".
>> 
>> Page 25, section 8.4, 2nd bullet item: change "to" to "in".
>> 
>> Page 25, section 8.4, 3rd bullet item: change first "to" to "in".
>> 
>> Page 25, section 9, 2nd paragraph: between the usage in section 3.1.1 and here,
>> choose a consistent case for "master_key". I know, RFC 5926 (Master_Key) and
>> RFC 5925 (master_key) are not consistent between themselves.
>> 
>> 
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