From nobody Mon Sep 20 07:43:00 2021 Return-Path: X-Original-To: tcpm@ietfa.amsl.com Delivered-To: tcpm@ietfa.amsl.com Received: from localhost (localhost [127.0.0.1]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id A38E83A1370; Mon, 20 Sep 2021 07:42:54 -0700 (PDT) X-Virus-Scanned: amavisd-new at amsl.com X-Spam-Flag: NO X-Spam-Score: -2.099 X-Spam-Level: X-Spam-Status: No, score=-2.099 tagged_above=-999 required=5 tests=[BAYES_00=-1.9, DKIM_SIGNED=0.1, DKIM_VALID=-0.1, DKIM_VALID_AU=-0.1, DKIM_VALID_EF=-0.1, SPF_HELO_NONE=0.001, SPF_PASS=-0.001, URIBL_BLOCKED=0.001] autolearn=ham autolearn_force=no Authentication-Results: ietfa.amsl.com (amavisd-new); dkim=pass (1024-bit key) header.d=eggert.org Received: from mail.ietf.org ([4.31.198.44]) by localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) (amavisd-new, port 10024) with ESMTP id HBufXwHAJ531; Mon, 20 Sep 2021 07:42:48 -0700 (PDT) Received: from mail.eggert.org (mail.eggert.org [91.190.195.94]) (using TLSv1.2 with cipher ECDHE-RSA-AES128-GCM-SHA256 (128/128 bits)) (No client certificate requested) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTPS id DF1DD3A1318; Mon, 20 Sep 2021 07:42:43 -0700 (PDT) Received: from smtpclient.apple (unknown [IPv6:2a00:ac00:4000:400:e86e:250b:c4c0:fcfb]) (using TLSv1.2 with cipher ECDHE-RSA-AES256-GCM-SHA384 (256/256 bits)) (No client certificate requested) by mail.eggert.org (Postfix) with ESMTPSA id A9957600A7B; Mon, 20 Sep 2021 17:42:16 +0300 (EEST) DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/simple; d=eggert.org; s=dkim; t=1632148936; bh=6LnN/cYHuStkLmIV79H40ITTzBpGsCn4Y2gV1iLkkiA=; h=From:Subject:Date:In-Reply-To:Cc:To:References; b=OeCZ7I92/fnf3sf6eOtxB/oAjEcLbHqOELMVxOCR4AlDZaushjuM7APgfKPNWlinj NpH+tdOP0xu6Z+CMPA4iHYVP5+PUrv9FpEeS0UpIdm9k470hNWkV1W0f1jYxCzu1WC ijmapmmVgn+XtAOu6WD0pmECV98DzxbYW8TBvyE4= From: Lars Eggert Message-Id: <1277BB29-5BBC-4AA1-A8DA-0830D5CADB47@eggert.org> Content-Type: multipart/signed; boundary="Apple-Mail=_F41095FF-1335-4887-BE76-B07BCB6235E0"; protocol="application/pgp-signature"; micalg=pgp-sha512 Mime-Version: 1.0 (Mac OS X Mail 14.0 \(3654.120.0.1.13\)) Date: Mon, 20 Sep 2021 17:42:15 +0300 In-Reply-To: <162938881515.25728.6614973558649060815@ietfa.amsl.com> Cc: General Area Review Team , last-call@ietf.org, tcpm IETF list , draft-ietf-tcpm-rfc793bis.all@ietf.org To: Francis Dupont References: <162938881515.25728.6614973558649060815@ietfa.amsl.com> X-MailScanner-ID: A9957600A7B.A290A X-MailScanner: Found to be clean X-MailScanner-From: lars@eggert.org Archived-At: Subject: Re: [tcpm] Genart last call partial review of draft-ietf-tcpm-rfc793bis-24 X-BeenThere: tcpm@ietf.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.29 Precedence: list List-Id: TCP Maintenance and Minor Extensions Working Group List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Mon, 20 Sep 2021 14:42:58 -0000 --Apple-Mail=_F41095FF-1335-4887-BE76-B07BCB6235E0 Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Francis, thank you for your review. I have entered a Discuss ballot for = this document based on my own review. Lars > On 2021-8-19, at 19:00, Francis Dupont via Datatracker = wrote: >=20 >=20 > Review is partially done. Another assignment may be needed to complete = it. >=20 > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review result: Ready with Nits >=20 > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. >=20 > For more information, please see the FAQ at >=20 > . >=20 > Document: draft-ietf-tcpm-rfc793bis-24 > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 2021-08-18 > IETF LC End Date: 2021-08-02 > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat >=20 > Summary: Ready with Nits >=20 > Major issues: None >=20 > Minor issues: None >=20 > Nits/editorial comments: >=20 > Only editorial comments: there are a lot of inconsistencies on US/UK = spelling > for instance acknowledgment vs acknowledgement, or e.g., vs e.g.. = These should > be addressed by the RFC Ediror. Note there is an i.e, (vs correct = i.e.,) in > 3.8.6.2.1. page 47. >=20 > I did not fully verify the technical details mainly because I review = I-Ds in > public transports so without the whole collection of merged RFCs and = errata. > In fact I only checked the figure 5 section 3.3.2 page 17 because an = arrow > missed from it in the original RFC: this is addressed by the note 2 (I > compared with the fixed state transition diagram of the TCP/IP = Illustrated > volume 2). >=20 > There is a small note for the IESG in section 5 page 92 in the very = last > paragraph about a PERPASS/privacy review. >=20 > Regards >=20 >=20 > _______________________________________________ > tcpm mailing list > tcpm@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/tcpm --Apple-Mail=_F41095FF-1335-4887-BE76-B07BCB6235E0 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Content-Disposition: attachment; filename=signature.asc Content-Type: application/pgp-signature; name=signature.asc Content-Description: Message signed with OpenPGP -----BEGIN PGP SIGNATURE----- iQIzBAEBCgAdFiEEmpq0ZpSoejRmyhheVLXDCb9wwVcFAmFInccACgkQVLXDCb9w wVdOERAAzzs5TYv3mAybJRov75z8Lqy/kUQdJ7L/zjk2km2ox+UfUddiVs9ncL8T gcpCnxQaq9JU9eVqoV5sOIiItUAYQrl0XIg02BoWQpdw/jJu6x0Wq4CT10P+ww3Z /tQbKENWfQAI5W7IXnjFiLarwtaI/gOoSOmuwp4OevwCzumc9pd51SKcMKLcbxG0 b3ITGCy9H3Oe037hMfmYtRXHKaZ+jlpsuAs0cFYdVd8KVGrad6ImWLpuvMEqal7W pgW/wRzg2gFqHB1l8ucluRpmWROJc6RrC258MM9InmKMZAqTJdYrcxeqNmkqpnz7 aA3jQOJL+tWVzcCj/8DAJeDuQNsveuGIJpgeLvQ/aTbshn8aOlXm5SjPvIleDMUN dbZw7000Y6kp+HwuQZSDhWJiqCJJtB//8Mrstqj3PvspfK0y8fI9Ejyd77M1WLg6 7WJGQbRLgAkMeynAriFzQbL9f0qfXPb5UFbsXxypyMWBjhg9v7ZJ/detmGN9BC82 FwA0SgqhKoArQvGSe8YecC19dnLPi2KK7TapBlCay7ZV8cj2067jNMvXHI1Dwah5 eQ53iogSJdffHaLTAZd9KhAi4oHQL7WQWzLnK74eI8TV8HlXg7nJVIfRUqm30trS vlvEp0M9GPHQL8q8jfGaW71qkIr23UTZzsUCmgQIQMGd6L3D8l8= =q1Sm -----END PGP SIGNATURE----- --Apple-Mail=_F41095FF-1335-4887-BE76-B07BCB6235E0--