Re: [tcpm] review of rev 14 of RFC 793 bis part 1 of 2 - Editorial Comments

Wesley Eddy <wes@mti-systems.com> Tue, 17 December 2019 14:29 UTC

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Subject: Re: [tcpm] review of rev 14 of RFC 793 bis part 1 of 2 - Editorial Comments
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Hi Gorry, I've been applying all of the editorial comments from your 
review, and they should show up in an update later this week.

There are some of them that I had quick responses to.


> ---
> OLD:
>   An "XXX" indicates a segment which is lost or rejected.
> - rejected seems odd here.
> NEW:
>   An "XXX" indicates a segment that is lost (not processed by the 
> receiving TCP endpoint).

Strangely, it seems like in 793, the "XXX" is explained, but never 
occurs otherwise in the text or diagrams.  I think we can just remove 
this sentence entirely?


> multiple OLD: "TCPs" and "a TCP"
> - This use of a "TCP" as an entity read as very ugly to me. I had to 
> read the sentences several times to parse them, could we explain that 
> we mean, i.e. "TCP endpoints" or "TCP implementations" etc. (usually 
> this seems to mean implementation). 
I'm fine with doing this.  It's a lot of changes though, so I wanted to 
quickly see if anyone strongly disagrees with doing this.


> OLD:
>    SYN (pun intended)
> - I didn't see the pun, can this be explained or omitted?

I think the intent from Jon (or whoever originally wrote this part) was 
"original sin".  We should probably remove this anyways in order to 
avoid cultural references that may not be understood by everyone.