[Teas-ns-dt] Minor issues with the existing text in the "isolation" appendix...
Eric Gray <eric.gray@ericsson.com> Thu, 25 June 2020 16:59 UTC
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From: Eric Gray <eric.gray@ericsson.com>
To: Kiran Makhijani <kiranm@futurewei.com>, "Rokui, Reza (Nokia - CA/Ottawa)"
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Thread-Topic: Minor issues with the existing text in the "isolation"
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Subject: [Teas-ns-dt] Minor issues with the existing text in the "isolation"
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Kiran/Reza,
In today's meeting, I mentioned that there are some minor issues with the 4th paragraph in the current isolation text in the appendix.
Whether or not we end moving the appendix text, these should be fixed.
1. Simillarly (next to last sentence) is misspelled. It should be "Similarly."
2. The next to last sentence needs a couple of additional articles: insert "the" between "such as" and "technical approaches" and "a" between "mentioned in" and "previous paragraph" (I am fairly certain that the paragraph referred to is the 2nd preceding paragraph - which includes the phrase "... the main technical approaches [...] are ...").
3. Last sentence: "realization" should be "realizations" (needs to match in number with "these are some").
In addition, I would prefer to explicitly state that traffic separation using VPN technology is an example, by adding "for example," after the comma - but this is not critical (VPN is - again - technology specific and other means exist for providing traffic separation).
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Eric