Re: [Teas] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-ietf-teas-actn-framework-14: (with COMMENT)
Ben Campbell <ben@nostrum.com> Wed, 23 May 2018 22:40 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Teas] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-ietf-teas-actn-framework-14: (with COMMENT)
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Sounds good, thanks! Ben. > On May 23, 2018, at 5:38 PM, Leeyoung <leeyoung@huawei.com> wrote: > > Hi Ben, > > Thanks for your kind words for the document and providing good comments. > > For the first comment, yes, it is indeed too long a sentence. How about: > > OLD > This document describes a set of management and control functions > used to operate one or more TE networks to construct virtual > networks that can be represented to customers and that are built > from abstractions of the underlying TE networks so that, for > example, a link in the customer's network is constructed from a path > or collection of paths in the underlying networks. > > NEW > This document describes a set of management and control functions > used to operate one or more TE networks to construct virtual > networks that can be represented to customers and that are built > from abstractions of the underlying TE networks. For > example, a link in the customer's network is constructed from a path > or collection of paths in the underlying networks > > For your second point, yes I agree. We will put the figure all in the same page. > > Please let us know if our response is acceptable by you. > > Thanks & Best regards, > Young and Daniele, > > -----Original Message----- > From: Ben Campbell [mailto:ben@nostrum.com] > Sent: Wednesday, May 23, 2018 1:01 PM > To: The IESG <iesg@ietf.org> > Cc: draft-ietf-teas-actn-framework@ietf.org; Vishnu Beeram <vbeeram@juniper.net>; teas-chairs@ietf.org; vbeeram@juniper.net; teas@ietf.org > Subject: Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-ietf-teas-actn-framework-14: (with COMMENT) > > Ben Campbell has entered the following ballot position for > draft-ietf-teas-actn-framework-14: No Objection > > When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) > > > Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html > for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. > > > The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-teas-actn-framework/ > > > > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > COMMENT: > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > > Thanks for an easy to read draft. I have a couple of nits: > > §1, last paragraph: The first sentence is kind of convoluted. Can it be broken into simpler sentences? > > Figure 1: Is it possible to keep the figure all on the same page? The break makes it easy to miss the entire point, (i.e. why is this 3 tier; I only see 2 > tiers) > >