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On Tue, Jun 11, 2024 at 2:55=E2=80=AFPM Susan Hares via Datatracker < noreply@ietf.org> wrote: > Reviewer: Susan Hares > Review result: Has Nits > > Status: > General Comment: Thank you for your careful work on this document. > Ready with Editorial Nits: > > #1 page 25 - add period to sentence > > identity vn-computation-error-not-ready { > base vn-computation-error-reason; > description > "VN computation has failed because the MDSC is not > ready"; > } > > Dhruv: Added '.' to all description clauses. > #2 Security section: Grammar > Old/ > * ap: this list includes a set of sensitive data that influences how > the access points in the VN service are attached. / > New:/ > * ap: This list includes a set of sensitive data that influences how > the access points in the VN service are attached. / > > Old:/ > * vn-ap: this list includes a set of sensitive data that influences > how the VN service is delivered. / > New:/ > * vn-ap: This list includes a set of sensitive data that influences > how the VN service is delivered. > / > Old:/ > * vn: this list includes a set of sensitive data that influences how > the VN service is delivered. By accessing the following data > nodes, an attacker may be able to manipulate the VN./ > New:/ > * vn: This list includes a set of sensitive data that influences how > the VN service is delivered. By accessing the following data > nodes, an attacker may be able to manipulate the VN./ > Old:/ > * vn-member: this list includes a set of sensitive data that > influences how the VN member in the VN service is delivered. By > accessing the following data nodes, an attacker may be able to > manipulate the VN member./ > New:/ > * vn-member: This list includes a set of sensitive data that > influences how the VN member in the VN service is delivered. By > accessing the following data nodes, an attacker may be able to > manipulate the VN member./ > > Dhruv: Ack, updated in my local copy! Thanks! Dhruv --000000000000a122bf061ac04a46 Content-Type: text/html; charset="UTF-8" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable
Hi Sue,

Thanks for your review.

On Tue, Jun 11, 2024= at 2:55=E2=80=AFPM Susan Hares via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> wrote:
Reviewer: Susan Hares
Review result: Has Nits

Status:
General Comment: Thank you for your careful work on this document.
Ready with Editorial Nits:

#1 page 25 - add period to sentence

=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0identity vn-computation-error-not-ready {
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0base vn-computation-error-reason;
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0description
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0"VN computation has failed because t= he MDSC is not
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 ready";
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0}


Dhruv: Added '.' to all description clauses.=C2=A0=C2=A0
=C2=A0
#2 Security section: Grammar
Old/
=C2=A0 =C2=A0*=C2=A0 ap: this list includes a set of sensitive data that in= fluences how
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 the access points in the VN service are attached.=C2= =A0 =C2=A0/
New:/
=C2=A0 =C2=A0*=C2=A0 ap: This list includes a set of sensitive data that in= fluences how
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 the access points in the VN service are attached.=C2= =A0 =C2=A0/

Old:/
=C2=A0 =C2=A0*=C2=A0 vn-ap: this list includes a set of sensitive data that= influences
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 how the VN service is delivered. /
New:/
=C2=A0 =C2=A0*=C2=A0 vn-ap: This list includes a set of sensitive data that= influences
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 how the VN service is delivered.
/
Old:/
=C2=A0 =C2=A0*=C2=A0 vn: this list includes a set of sensitive data that in= fluences how
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 the VN service is delivered.=C2=A0 By accessing the fo= llowing data
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 nodes, an attacker may be able to manipulate the VN./<= br> New:/
=C2=A0 =C2=A0*=C2=A0 vn: This list includes a set of sensitive data that in= fluences how
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 the VN service is delivered.=C2=A0 By accessing the fo= llowing data
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 nodes, an attacker may be able to manipulate the VN./<= br> Old:/
=C2=A0 =C2=A0*=C2=A0 vn-member: this list includes a set of sensitive data = that
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 influences how the VN member in the VN service is deli= vered.=C2=A0 By
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 accessing the following data nodes, an attacker may be= able to
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 manipulate the VN member./
New:/
=C2=A0 =C2=A0*=C2=A0 vn-member: This list includes a set of sensitive data = that
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 influences how the VN member in the VN service is deli= vered.=C2=A0 By
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 accessing the following data nodes, an attacker may be= able to
=C2=A0 =C2=A0 =C2=A0 manipulate the VN member./


Dhruv: Ack, updated in my local copy!=C2=A0

Thanks!=C2=A0
Dhruv

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