Re: [Teas] FW: I-D Action: draft-ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang-05.txt

Young Lee <leeyoung@futurewei.com> Tue, 02 July 2019 14:49 UTC

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From: Young Lee <leeyoung@futurewei.com>
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Hi Tom,



Thanks for your comments. My apology for a delayed response. Please see inline for my comment.



Thanks.

Young



-----Original Message-----

From: tom petch [mailto:ietfa@btconnect.com]

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Subject: Re: [Teas] FW: I-D Action: draft-ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang-05.txt



----- Original Message -----

From: "Young Lee" <leeyoung@futurewei.com>

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Sent: Friday, June 14, 2019 7:44 PM



> Hi WG,

>

> The changes for this revision are as follows:

>

> - Added in Introduction Section on how the VN model can support 5G

transport context.

> - in Section 3.2: case 2 --- clarified how VN model is used along with

TE-topo Connectivity matrices construct and added a paragraph to introduce the JSON example of the models (in Section 7)

> - For YANG model: converted "ltp" from configurable parameter to

leafref type; added references for imported modules.

> - Editorial: affiliation changes for a co-author; Compliant with five

front page authors' list.



As I said of -03, rather short on references and some that are seem wrong.

Look, for example, at

draft-ietf-pim-igmp-mld-yang-15.

to see the sort of level of reference that a YANG module benefits from.



YL>> It will be good to be specific on which references are wrong and what needs to be added.



Several of the existing references should be Normative, according to YANG Guidelines.



YL>> Again, can you point which ones you think Normative?



You have

       import ietf-te-types { prefix "te-types";

           reference"I-D.ietf-teas-yang-te-types: Traffic Engineering



but in the list of prefixes, always a good thing to have, is

      | te-types| ietf-te-types  | [TE-Tunnel]     |



while the I-D References has

   [TE-tunnel] T. Saad, et al., "A YANG Data Model for Traffic

             Engineering Tunnels and Interfaces", work in progress:

             draft-ietf-teas-yang-te.

which looks like a mismatch.



YL>> Yes, you're right. The reference should be TE-type as TE-type was separated out from TE-tunnel model. Will correct this in the revision.



VN is expanded in the text but I think needs expanding in the Title of the I-D and in the YANG module; others need expanding on first use; L3SM,  L2SM  and L1CSM



YL>> OK. Agreed.



And I think you should provide a reference for VN up front, something along the lines of "For more information on Virtual Networks, see [RFC8453]"

in the Introduction, first paragraph. (I don't think that RFC8453 is a brilliant reference for VN but I cannot find a better one).



YL>> Agree. Will add the VN reference up front.



Tom Petch



> Thanks.

> Young & Dhruv

>

> -----Original Message-----

> From: Teas [mailto:teas-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of

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> Sent: Friday, June 14, 2019 1:28 PM

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> Subject: [Teas] I-D Action: draft-ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang-05.txt

>

>

> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts

directories.

> This draft is a work item of the Traffic Engineering Architecture and

Signaling WG of the IETF.

>

>         Title           : A Yang Data Model for VN Operation

>         Authors         : Young Lee

>                           Dhruv Dhody

>                           Daniele Ceccarelli

>                           Igor Bryskin

>                           Bin Yeong Yoon

> Filename        : draft-ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang-05.txt

> Pages           : 56

> Date            : 2019-06-14

>

> Abstract:

>    This document provides a YANG data model generally applicable to

any

>    mode of Virtual Network (VN) operation.

>