Re: [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-use-cases-10
Dhruv Dhody <dhruv.ietf@gmail.com> Mon, 11 July 2022 22:43 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-use-cases-10
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Hi Adrian, Thanks for your review. I made an update - https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-use-cases-11 On Sun, Jul 3, 2022 at 3:57 AM Adrian Farrel <adrian@olddog.co.uk> wrote: > Hi, > > > > I'm a day late on the WGLC review. Sorry. > > > > Chairs, don't you think you should have notified the PCE working group > > about this last call? Maybe you can drop them a note to give them a > > change to make any comments while the authors are handling the TEAS > > last call comments and the shepherd is doing their business? > > > > > > I've reviewed and commented on this document in the past, and the > > authors updated the text to address my concerns. I have a few further > > minor comments below, but otherwise I have no objection to this document > > moving forward. > > > > Best, > > Adrian > > > > === > > > > You have just one use of "MUST", in Appendix A.3, and an Appendix is not > > normative and so shouldn't use BCP 14 language. So you should change > > his to "must". > > Ack. > > > You have one use of "SHOULD" in 3.3.2. Given how everywhere else uses > > "should", this looks odd and can probably change. > > > Agreed. > You also have a number of uses of "SHOULD" in Appendix A.4. The same > > logic applies that you shouldn't be using normative language in a non- > > normative section of the document, so you should change to "should". > > > Changed. > There is also one use of "MAY" in A.4. Same logic. > > > Ack. > Thus Requirements Language boilerplate is not needed and should be > > removed. > > > Removed. > --- > > > > Section 1 > > > > s/draft/document/ > > > Ack > --- > > > > Section 2 could probably use references for the terminology. How about: > > > > OSPF rfc 2328 and rfc 5340 > > IS-IS rfc 1195 > > PCC rfc 4655 > > PCE rfc 4655 > > TE draft-ietf-teas-rfc3272bis > > Done > > > --- > > > > 3.1 > > > > s/PCE- based/PCE-based/ > > > > SID is used without expansion > > > Ack > --- > > > > I think 3.1 is supposed to be a general introduction to the remaining > > subsections of section 3. It might be helpful if some text in 3.1 made > > this clear because, otherwise, section 3.1 seems very lightweight and > > speculative, but as an introduction to the sections that follow, it is > > fine. > > > > You might event 'promote' the text from 3.1 to section 3. > > > Add a list in section 3 with some more explanation. > --- > > > > Figures: > > > > - The figure in section 3.2 needs a caption and figure number > > - The figure in section 3.3.1 needs a caption and figure number > > - The figure in section 3.4.1 needs a caption and figure number > > - The figure in section 3.4.2.1 needs a caption and a figure number > > - The figure in section 3.4.2.2 needs a caption and a figure number > > - The figure in section 3.6 needs a caption and a figure number > > - All figures should be explicitly referenced in the text (i.e., don't > > use "in the figure below" but use "in Figure 3"). You can do this > > using <xref> > > > Done > --- > > > > 3.2 > > > > Segment Routing, LDP, and RSVP-TE could use references on this, their > > first, use. > > > > s/[RFC8664] specify/[RFC8664] specifies/ > > > Ack > --- > > > > 3.2.2 > > > > s/the PCECC just need/the PCECC just needs/ > > s/path just need/path just needs/ > > > Ack > --- > > > > 3.4 > > > > Please expand P2MP or mLDP on first use. > > > > --- > > > > 3.4.2.2 > > > > Please expand PLR and MP on first use. > > > > --- > > > > 3.7 > > > > Please expand NSH on first use > > > Ack Thanks again for looking through the document again! Regards, Dhruv > *From:* Teas <teas-bounces@ietf.org> *On Behalf Of *Vishnu Pavan Beeram > *Sent:* 17 June 2022 08:12 > *To:* TEAS WG <teas@ietf.org> > *Cc:* TEAS WG Chairs <teas-chairs@ietf.org> > *Subject:* [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-use-cases-10 > > > > All, > > This starts a two-week working group last call on > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-use-cases/ > > > > The working group last call ends on July 1st, 2022. > > Please send your comments to the working group mailing list. > > Positive comments, e.g., "I've reviewed this document > and believe it is ready for publication", are welcome! > This is useful and important, even from authors. > > Note: IPR has been disclosed on this document > > > Thank you, > Pavan and Lou > _______________________________________________ > Teas mailing list > Teas@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/teas >
- [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-use-ca… Vishnu Pavan Beeram
- Re: [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-us… Quintin Zhao
- Re: [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-us… Dhruv Dhody
- Re: [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-us… Lizhenbin
- Re: [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-us… Dongjie (Jimmy)
- Re: [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-us… Boris Khasanov
- Re: [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-us… Aijun Wang
- Re: [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-us… Wubo (lana)
- Re: [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-us… Adrian Farrel
- Re: [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-us… Vishnu Pavan Beeram
- Re: [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-us… Dhruv Dhody
- Re: [Teas] WG Last Call: draft-ietf-teas-pcecc-us… Vishnu Pavan Beeram