Return-Path: X-Original-To: teas@ietfa.amsl.com Delivered-To: teas@ietfa.amsl.com Received: from localhost (localhost [127.0.0.1]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id 4448AC18DBAB; Thu, 6 Jun 2024 23:58:56 -0700 (PDT) X-Virus-Scanned: amavisd-new at amsl.com X-Spam-Flag: NO X-Spam-Score: -2.094 X-Spam-Level: X-Spam-Status: No, score=-2.094 tagged_above=-999 required=5 tests=[BAYES_00=-1.9, DKIM_SIGNED=0.1, DKIM_VALID=-0.1, DKIM_VALID_AU=-0.1, DKIM_VALID_EF=-0.1, FREEMAIL_FROM=0.001, HTML_MESSAGE=0.001, RCVD_IN_ZEN_BLOCKED_OPENDNS=0.001, SPF_HELO_NONE=0.001, SPF_PASS=-0.001, URIBL_BLOCKED=0.001, URIBL_DBL_BLOCKED_OPENDNS=0.001, URIBL_ZEN_BLOCKED_OPENDNS=0.001] autolearn=ham autolearn_force=no Authentication-Results: ietfa.amsl.com (amavisd-new); dkim=pass (2048-bit key) header.d=gmail.com Received: from mail.ietf.org ([50.223.129.194]) by localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) (amavisd-new, port 10024) with ESMTP id 6GVjKagufpkg; Thu, 6 Jun 2024 23:58:52 -0700 (PDT) Received: from mail-ua1-x933.google.com (mail-ua1-x933.google.com [IPv6:2607:f8b0:4864:20::933]) (using TLSv1.3 with cipher TLS_AES_128_GCM_SHA256 (128/128 bits) key-exchange X25519 server-signature RSA-PSS (2048 bits) server-digest SHA256) (No client certificate requested) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTPS id 5B233C18DB8D; Thu, 6 Jun 2024 23:58:52 -0700 (PDT) Received: by mail-ua1-x933.google.com with SMTP id a1e0cc1a2514c-80ae09dce70so1252445241.1; Thu, 06 Jun 2024 23:58:52 -0700 (PDT) DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=gmail.com; s=20230601; t=1717743531; x=1718348331; darn=ietf.org; h=cc:to:subject:message-id:date:from:in-reply-to:references :mime-version:from:to:cc:subject:date:message-id:reply-to; bh=wyPi7tjaThp3vv1wpF2kuMu6034VP7RyqoibaNgR/CA=; b=hTnkT9yZeTsRP77Xie09nlOCT5eJRQgVTauqkZnNUCMpxAIAAS0vBAbUotXerIXBHj bIYK345y/mDAhn0/3ppjZ4o0tHLDfngJ/3BqOlDBET80bci8J7o+9gmuCwPENSXW4jY7 oDuq7enxl5oEFPzNwamnI0Fl/tERhcUStGhCQTluIPsHdAvj3KK524jMOPPtxENBUYJk ktzwNQCAvQu5T7hwGarAfuax6VYAepyIzu8ISIaKbw6ev4p7QTv5opt/xHNEEiRdwVxc hX8OxUcsTtfy/xJndZQqQhuGPRDkkUUDq4qu3mEfwTLZCeoR09I67z2AI8ANALdyydKO 68vQ== X-Google-DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=1e100.net; s=20230601; t=1717743531; x=1718348331; h=cc:to:subject:message-id:date:from:in-reply-to:references :mime-version:x-gm-message-state:from:to:cc:subject:date:message-id :reply-to; bh=wyPi7tjaThp3vv1wpF2kuMu6034VP7RyqoibaNgR/CA=; b=kZwZTYNLn32o9clK1wG1dn/NV8nZcjmCSdsTy8f5tteeoEk2Bd018fUMjl6PDLaJji P5weeSV9iKJ3Zr+V3qLbYVKItqFOAuLCaLSYqAYFBWR4actsIIywIMxe3Xs4CpMQpLV2 XvAzdtxDBia/TxkUZ0k/dqb6Vx8a80H0b2lhNYJbiN7VZERta2gWyFxYzKc1F3jri6QP MhlXkC+S6Fkeu5MSifltam38iNXtcVwmrsDhDhtbq35m8pJOZO58YhcuabZEWtk/HADe WyhJYWn0YtSoq1ryVhOb/yOz0P/iU9p2OiuNKZcZh45RR9ACZszPhl+15xkixQJ7Hwfr avJQ== X-Forwarded-Encrypted: i=1; AJvYcCV12BapeiVBCdbLulroE2PkTB1Go+l5V3AVGc7JnnD+2bh863SgxGEwDMvsw3to2fBGFyOy3JgyWbuhCAE6qu7z+Rfp81d0AXdbIPVnpkQi/zlTa8QgLjrY7sy+/3mRB+jeF+AaFL1Y0mYb8XBZhIz65TMs3SLhPbCAo55z X-Gm-Message-State: AOJu0YywI5902hhK1X/rkl6YyLrsQsgkvM4ORGzhe5gsB6Bv/Ko573bF lC+LsjVWudRLMDJsVpab0HPZVtH88QliOVyzNygLmAG9d2XXCIh1/4AkSWOUG+Xj8WxdQ/7rXHn oajGafmjuJsAybxb6m1Z6Jo2hKmjACYpHZLdTsQ== X-Google-Smtp-Source: AGHT+IFncVRiyL5JKiP6nqhN4Q0imrR2sdf66kmmGA9PEgq2A0OsVL4dcLOet901O7YjZBGSMThtkx0zgSelXF/Bc9A= X-Received: by 2002:a67:bb06:0:b0:48b:dc86:6154 with SMTP id ada2fe7eead31-48c16eebc9bmr5003904137.4.1717743531065; Thu, 06 Jun 2024 23:58:51 -0700 (PDT) MIME-Version: 1.0 References: <171773385108.61448.2237900893031611266@ietfa.amsl.com> In-Reply-To: <171773385108.61448.2237900893031611266@ietfa.amsl.com> From: Dhruv Dhody Date: Fri, 7 Jun 2024 07:58:14 +0100 Message-ID: To: Shivan Sahib Content-Type: multipart/alternative; boundary="000000000000fc094d061a475458" Message-ID-Hash: OBZO5KD3DOD4LKGWP5ZUCZY7I4R2VIFS X-Message-ID-Hash: OBZO5KD3DOD4LKGWP5ZUCZY7I4R2VIFS X-MailFrom: dhruv.ietf@gmail.com X-Mailman-Rule-Misses: dmarc-mitigation; no-senders; approved; emergency; loop; banned-address; member-moderation; header-match-teas.ietf.org-0; nonmember-moderation; administrivia; implicit-dest; max-recipients; max-size; news-moderation; no-subject; digests; suspicious-header CC: secdir@ietf.org, draft-ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang.all@ietf.org, last-call@ietf.org, teas@ietf.org X-Mailman-Version: 3.3.9rc4 Precedence: list Subject: =?utf-8?q?=5BTeas=5D_Re=3A_Secdir_last_call_review_of_draft-ietf-teas-actn-v?= =?utf-8?q?n-yang-26?= List-Id: Traffic Engineering Architecture and Signaling working group discussion list Archived-At: List-Archive: List-Help: List-Owner: List-Post: List-Subscribe: List-Unsubscribe: --000000000000fc094d061a475458 Content-Type: text/plain; charset="UTF-8" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable Hi Shivan, On Fri, Jun 7, 2024 at 5:17=E2=80=AFAM Shivan Sahib via Datatracker < noreply@ietf.org> wrote: > Reviewer: Shivan Sahib > Review result: Ready > > I found the descriptions of sensitive data nodes in Security Consideratio= ns > useful. I'm sure they'll be helpful to implementers. > > nit: In Security Considerations, "Therefore, many security risks such as > malicious attack and rogue elements attempting to connect to various ACTN > components." is incomplete. > > Dhruv: Ack, updated. > nit: in Introduction, "Abstraction and Control of Traffic Engineered > Networks > (ACTN) describes a set of management and control functions used to operat= e > one > or more TE networks to construct Virtual Network (VN) that can be > represented > to customers and that are built from abstractions of the underlying TE > networks > [RFC8453]" reads awkwardly. Also "TE" is not defined before being used > (it's > defined in the reference). > > Dhruv: Ack, updated. Diff: https://author-tools.ietf.org/iddiff?url1=3Ddraft-ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang-26= &url2=3Ddraft-ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang-27&difftype=3D--html Thanks! Dhruv --000000000000fc094d061a475458 Content-Type: text/html; charset="UTF-8" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable
Hi Shivan,

On Fri, Jun 7, 2024 at 5:17=E2=80=AFAM Shivan Sahib v= ia Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org= > wrote:
Revi= ewer: Shivan Sahib
Review result: Ready

I found the descriptions of sensitive data nodes in Security Considerations=
useful. I'm sure they'll be helpful to implementers.

nit: In Security Considerations, "Therefore, many security risks such = as
malicious attack and rogue elements attempting to connect to various ACTN components." is incomplete.


Dhruv: Ack, updated.

=C2=A0
nit: in Introduction, "Abstraction and Control of Traffic Engineered N= etworks
(ACTN) describes a set of management and control functions used to operate = one
or more TE networks to construct Virtual Network (VN) that can be represent= ed
to customers and that are built from abstractions of the underlying TE netw= orks
[RFC8453]" reads awkwardly. Also "TE" is not defined before = being used (it's
defined in the reference).


Dhruv: Ack, updated.=C2=A0

Diff:=C2= =A0https://author-tools.ietf.org/iddiff?url1=3Ddraft-ietf-teas-actn-vn-y= ang-26&url2=3Ddraft-ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang-27&difftype=3D--html=

Thanks!
Dhruv
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