Re: [Teas] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-ietf-teas-yang-te-topo-16: (with COMMENT)

Ben Campbell <ben@nostrum.com> Sun, 24 June 2018 03:51 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Teas] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-ietf-teas-yang-te-topo-16: (with COMMENT)
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Thanks for the response. None of my comments were blocking, so I will trust the authors to do the right thing.

Thanks!

Ben.

> On Jun 23, 2018, at 9:42 PM, Xufeng Liu <xufeng.liu.ietf@gmail.com> wrote:
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> Hi Ben,
> 
> Thanks for the comments. We have posted an undated version https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-teas-yang-te-topo-17 to address these. Please check the updated draft.
> 
> Best regards,
> - Xufeng
> 
> On Wed, Jun 6, 2018 at 3:08 PM Ben Campbell <ben@nostrum.com> wrote:
> Ben Campbell has entered the following ballot position for
> draft-ietf-teas-yang-te-topo-16: No Objection
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> COMMENT:
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> Just some editorial comments:
> 
> - There is conflicting 2119/8174 boilerplate in the front material and in §1.1.
> I assume the latter is the correct boilerplate.
> 
>  [Xufeng]: Fixed.
> 
> - The writing style makes heavy use of imbedded definitions and examples in
> parenthetical phrases. I personally find that creates quite a bit of
> readability friction. It would be easier to read if such things were split out
> into their own sentences.
> [Xufeng]: Many parenthetical phrases have been taken our of the parentheses.
> 
> - Some of the figures have legends, but most do not. It would be very helpful
> to include legends in those figures that depend on different line styles to
> convey meaning. (e.g. Figure 1).
> 
> [Xufeng]: Legends have been Added in such situations.