[TLS] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-tls-iana-registry-updates-04

Stewart Bryant <stewart.bryant@gmail.com> Tue, 20 February 2018 19:50 UTC

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Reviewer: Stewart Bryant
Review result: Ready with Issues

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Document: draft-ietf-tls-iana-registry-updates-05
Reviewer: Stewart Bryant
Review Date: 2018-02-20
IETF LC End Date: 2018-03-01
IESG Telechat date: 2018-03-08

Summary: A well written document that is difficult to check and easy to make a
mistake with. There are a tiny number of editorial matters. The matter of the
semantics of Recommended = no may need to further thought and clarification.

Major issues: None

Minor issues:

I think convention is to list the documents being updated in the Abstract, but
cannot find any formal guidance.


  If an item is marked as not recommended it does not necessarily mean
SB> Do you mean "marked as not recommended" or "not marked as recommended".

SB>  I am worried about the semantics of Recommended = no.
SB> Presumably there are three states: recommended, not recommended,
SB> and silent/don't know/don't care/not yet. Which of these
SB> states does Recommended = no represent?

Nits/editorial comments:

   This document describes a number of changes to (D)TLS IANA registries

SB> TLS is not a well known abbreviation and so needs expanding


   This document instructs IANA to make changes to a number of (D)TLS-

SB> TLS needs expanding