Re: [Drip] [Internet]Re: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-drip-arch-17.txt

["shuaiizhao(Shuai Zhao)" <[e-mail]>]

Hi Stu,

Basically yes, and A few things need your attention: 

Editor-note-1:
- I recall you have a comment regarding Figure 3. The original comment is as follows: 

"Section 1.3 Figure 3 is confusing: the Observer _sees_ (or hears, or otherwise senses) UAS but does not _connect_ to them; the Observer can connect via the Internet to another USS (and thence via the DSS) for queries regarding the UAS"
I will need your help to get a better understanding what is your proposing.  

Per Bob's comment, Once we resolve Editor-note-1, we need to recheck the language in Editor-note-8, to make sure the logic in CS-RID still correct. Both Editor-note can be resolved at the same time. 

Editor-note-2:
- please provide text for change

Editor-note-3: 
- Per your previous comment (If I recall correctly), either Bob or Adam needs to double check if language in this section is correct.

Editor-note-4: 
- I will try to cover this one, which is citing Req numbers in section 5

Edtior-note-5:
- regarding the title of section 6 "DRIP Identifier Trust". The original text came from Adam and you asked why we don’t we use the word "“authentication”. 
Should we change the tile of section 6 from "DRIP Identifier Trust" to "DRIP Identifier Authentication"?

Editor-note-6: 
- I will try to cover this one, which is citing Req numbers in section 7

Editor-note-7:
- Bob suggest move Section 3 to Section 2.4. My personally has no issues since it is all about new DRIP terminologies. I will make that changes until I heard differently.  

Best,
Shuai

On 11/30/21, 10:51, "Stuart W. Card" <[e-mail]> wrote:

    Shuai (as -arch editor) et al --

    Other than writing a sentence for the body text indicating that some of 
    the entities and relationships in the new Figure 4 are just context and 
    outside the scope of DRIP, and assisting with revision of Figure 3, I am 
    having trouble finding the action items specifically assigned to me?

    Thanks.

    -- Stu

    On 11/10/2021 10:32 PM, shuaiizhao(Shuai Zhao) wrote:
    > DRIP Enthusiast,
    > 
    > Revision 17 is uploaded which is trying to address the comments received 
    > during IETF week. Please see attached emails thread for previous 
    > conversations.
    > 
    > Best,
    > 
    > Shuai
    > 
    > -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
    > 
    > 
    > A new version of I-D, draft-ietf-drip-arch-17.txt
    > has been successfully submitted by Shuai Zhao and posted to the
    > IETF repository.
    > 
    > Name:draft-ietf-drip-arch
    > Revision:17
    > Title:Drone Remote Identification Protocol (DRIP) Architecture
    > Document date:2021-11-10
    > Group:drip
    > Pages:26
    > URL: https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft-ietf-drip-arch-17.txt 
    > <https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft-ietf-drip-arch-17.txt>
    > Status: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-drip-arch/ 
    > <https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-drip-arch/>
    > Htmlized: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-drip-arch 
    > <https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-drip-arch>
    > Diff: https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-drip-arch-17 
    > <https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-drip-arch-17>
    > 
    > Abstract:
    >    This document describes an architecture for protocols and services to
    >    support Unmanned Aircraft System Remote Identification and tracking
    >    (UAS RID), plus RID-related communications.  This architecture
    >    adheres to the requirements listed in the DRIP Requirements document.
    > 
    > 
    > 
    > 
    > The IETF Secretariat
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