Re: [trill] My thoughts/wording corrections -> draft-ietf-trill-ia-appsubtlv-02.txt
Donald Eastlake <d3e3e3@gmail.com> Thu, 26 February 2015 18:50 UTC
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Subject: Re: [trill] My thoughts/wording corrections -> draft-ietf-trill-ia-appsubtlv-02.txt
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Hi Gayle, Thanks. Those changes looks like good clarifications and corrections to the draft. I'll go over them more closely and incorporate them. Donald ============================= Donald E. Eastlake 3rd +1-508-333-2270 (cell) 155 Beaver Street, Milford, MA 01757 USA d3e3e3@gmail.com On Wed, Feb 25, 2015 at 11:44 PM, gayle noble <windy_1@skyhighway.com> wrote: > My thoughts/wording corrections ->[trill] > draft-ietf-trill-ia-appsubtlv-02.txt > > 1) Abstract > (this sentence is very long and complicated.) > This document specifies a TRILL (Transparent Interconnection of Lots of > Links) IS-IS application sub-TLV that enables the reporting by a TRILL > switch of sets of addresses such that all of the addresses in each set > designate the same interface (port) and the reporting for such a set of the > TRILL switch by which it is reachable. > (maybe re-adjust it something like this) > This document specifies a TRILL (Transparent Interconnection of Lots of > Links) IS-IS application sub-TLV that enables the reporting by a TRILL > switch of sets of information; each set consists of addresses and a nickname > of the TRILL switch by which those addresses can be reached; all of the > addresses in a set designate the same end station interface (port). > > 2) page 10 > (I would change "the" to "then") > (as written) > If they were used in a IA-APPsubTLV in a traditional LSP [ISO-10589], the > only one byte Types and Lengths could be used. > (it would become) > If they were used in a IA-APPsubTLV in a traditional LSP [ISO-10589], then > only one byte Types and Lengths could be used. > > 3) page 12 > (Should be "topology given" instead of "topology give") > (as written) > The presence of this sub-sub-TLV indicates that the interfaces given in > the IA APPsub-TLV are reachable in the topology give. > (I'd change it to) > The presence of this sub-sub-TLV indicates that the interfaces given in > the IA APPsub-TLV are reachable in the topology given. > > 4) page 12 > (This is not real clear as to what it is trying to communicate .. at least > to me) > (what is written) > It is useful if the IA APPsub-TLV occurs outside of the context of a message > indicating the topology or if it is desired and permitted to override that > specification. > (if I figured this out) > You might want to use the Data Label or Topology sub-sub-TLVs where the IA > APPsub-TLV is not in a message or some other context that specifies the Data > Label or Topology. (Multi-topologyTRILL really isn't fully specified yet but > the Topology sub-sub-TLV is provided for future use.) Alternatively, even if > the IA APPsub-TLV is inside a message or some other context, you might want > to specify that for some particular IA APPsub-TLV, a different Data Label or > different Topology should be used, so you might want to use the sub-sub-TLV > to override that specification. > > 5) page 14 > (I'd change "providing" to "provided") > (what is written) > Security on the wire, or in storage, for this data is to be providing by the > transport or storage used. > (What I'd put) > Security on the wire, or in storage, for this data is to be provided by the > transport or storage used. > > 6) page 19 last paragraph > (the word "give" is used where I'd use "given") > (as written) > The Fixed Address sub-sub-TLV causes the IPv6/64 value give to be treated as > if it occurred as a 4th entry inside each of the three Address Sets. > (I'd write) > The Fixed Address sub-sub-TLV causes the IPv6/64 value given to be treated > as if it occurred as a 4th entry inside each of the three Address Sets. > > 7) page 20 last paragraph > (I think "them" should be "then") > (as written) > The OUI would them be supplied by a second Fixed Address sub-sub-TLV proving > the OUI. > (I think it should be) > The OUI would then be supplied by a second Fixed Address sub-sub-TLV proving > the OUI. > > acronyms > AFN Address Family Number > APPsub-TLV Application sub-TLV > ARP Address Resolution Protocol > Data Label VLAN or FGL > ESADI End Station Address Distribution Information > FGL Fine Grained Label > FS-LSP Flooding Scoped Label Switched Paths > IA Interface Addresses > IETF Internet Engineering Task Force > IS-IS Intermediate System to Intermediate System > LAN Local-Area Network > MAC Media Access Control > ND Neighbor Discovery > OUI Organizationally Unique Identifier > PDU Protocol Data Unit > RARP Reverse Address Resolution Protocol > RBridge An alternative name for a TRILL switch > TLV Type Length Value > TRILL Transparent Interconnection of Lots of Links > TRILL switch A device that implements the TRILL protocol > VLAN Virtual Local-Area Network > _______________________________________________ > trill mailing list > trill@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/trill
- [trill] WG Adoption call for draft-yizhou-trill-a… Susan Hares
- Re: [trill] WG Adoption call for draft-yizhou-tri… Haoweiguo
- [trill] WG Adoption call for draft-yizhou-trill-a… somnath chatterjee
- Re: [trill] WG Adoption call for draft-yizhou-tri… Mingui Zhang
- Re: [trill] WG Adoption call for draft-yizhou-tri… Linda Dunbar
- Re: [trill] WG Adoption call for draft-yizhou-tri… Jon Hudson
- Re: [trill] WG Adoption call for draft-yizhou-tri… windy_1
- [trill] My thoughts/wording corrections -> draft-… gayle noble
- Re: [trill] My thoughts/wording corrections -> dr… Donald Eastlake
- Re: [trill] My thoughts/wording corrections -> dr… windy_1
- Re: [trill] WG Adoption call for draft-yizhou-tri… Susan Hares