Re: [trill] Shepherd's review Review of draft-ietf-trill-rfc6439bis-02.txt

"Susan Hares" <shares@ndzh.com> Fri, 19 August 2016 13:00 UTC

Return-Path: <shares@ndzh.com>
X-Original-To: trill@ietfa.amsl.com
Delivered-To: trill@ietfa.amsl.com
Received: from localhost (localhost [127.0.0.1]) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTP id B8BC412D125; Fri, 19 Aug 2016 06:00:55 -0700 (PDT)
X-Virus-Scanned: amavisd-new at amsl.com
X-Spam-Flag: NO
X-Spam-Score: 1.738
X-Spam-Level: *
X-Spam-Status: No, score=1.738 tagged_above=-999 required=5 tests=[BAYES_00=-1.9, DOS_OUTLOOK_TO_MX=2.845, RDNS_NONE=0.793] autolearn=no autolearn_force=no
Received: from mail.ietf.org ([4.31.198.44]) by localhost (ietfa.amsl.com [127.0.0.1]) (amavisd-new, port 10024) with ESMTP id KlWQGEgLpFke; Fri, 19 Aug 2016 06:00:54 -0700 (PDT)
Received: from hickoryhill-consulting.com (unknown [50.245.122.97]) (using TLSv1.2 with cipher ECDHE-RSA-AES128-GCM-SHA256 (128/128 bits)) (No client certificate requested) by ietfa.amsl.com (Postfix) with ESMTPS id 2DE52127735; Fri, 19 Aug 2016 06:00:54 -0700 (PDT)
X-Default-Received-SPF: pass (skip=loggedin (res=PASS)) x-ip-name=184.157.82.170;
From: "Susan Hares" <shares@ndzh.com>
To: "'Donald Eastlake'" <d3e3e3@gmail.com>
References: <0a6801d1f33b$dc589d30$9509d790$@ndzh.com> <0a7e01d1f33d$a4874c60$ed95e520$@ndzh.com> <CAF4+nEEE4Tq0dEpHefXyabKevqykyzx7BWFZxLupywxaV31_Cw@mail.gmail.com> <CAF4+nEGYU46ncKHLYynNJ=02TG84xhuU_Jiqc-ba8=UjLmA0-w@mail.gmail.com>
In-Reply-To: <CAF4+nEGYU46ncKHLYynNJ=02TG84xhuU_Jiqc-ba8=UjLmA0-w@mail.gmail.com>
Date: Fri, 19 Aug 2016 08:59:51 -0400
Message-ID: <029f01d1fa19$92f80830$b8e81890$@ndzh.com>
MIME-Version: 1.0
Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"
Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit
X-Mailer: Microsoft Outlook 14.0
Thread-Index: AQFgYLavMros8ZZ+vZhG7QJG+gULKgFmPhDrAlVdFeoCTOVCEKEDLaJA
Content-Language: en-us
X-Authenticated-User: skh@ndzh.com
Archived-At: <https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/trill/jqVA1wEzRYi3cV8A-a6sOcR5gv4>
Cc: trill@ietf.org, draft-ietf-trill-rfc6439bis@ietf.org, 'Jon Hudson' <jon.hudson@gmail.com>
Subject: Re: [trill] Shepherd's review Review of draft-ietf-trill-rfc6439bis-02.txt
X-BeenThere: trill@ietf.org
X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.17
Precedence: list
List-Id: "Developing a hybrid router/bridge." <trill.ietf.org>
List-Unsubscribe: <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/options/trill>, <mailto:trill-request@ietf.org?subject=unsubscribe>
List-Archive: <https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/browse/trill/>
List-Post: <mailto:trill@ietf.org>
List-Help: <mailto:trill-request@ietf.org?subject=help>
List-Subscribe: <https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/trill>, <mailto:trill-request@ietf.org?subject=subscribe>
X-List-Received-Date: Fri, 19 Aug 2016 13:00:56 -0000

Thank you for posting -03.txt.   It satisfies by editorial comments. 

Sue 

-----Original Message-----
From: trill [mailto:trill-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of Donald Eastlake
Sent: Friday, August 19, 2016 1:47 AM
To: Susan Hares
Cc: Jon Hudson; draft-ietf-trill-rfc6439bis@ietf.org; trill@ietf.org
Subject: Re: [trill] Shepherd's review Review of
draft-ietf-trill-rfc6439bis-02.txt

Version -03 just posted incorporates the editorial changes below.

Thanks,
Donald
===============================
 Donald E. Eastlake 3rd   +1-508-333-2270 (cell)
 155 Beaver Street, Milford, MA 01757 USA  d3e3e3@gmail.com


On Thu, Aug 11, 2016 at 12:01 AM, Donald Eastlake <d3e3e3@gmail.com>; wrote:
> Hi Sue,
>
> On Wed, Aug 10, 2016 at 3:30 PM, Susan Hares <shares@ndzh.com>; wrote:
>> Trill WG:
>>
>> I missed one other editorial change for RFC6439bis-02.txt.
>>
>> RFC7180 has been obsoleted by RFC7780.  This needs to be changed.
>
> Well, the only reference to RFC 7180 is in Appendix B where it is, in 
> fact, talking about RFC 7180 being obsoleted by RFC 7780. This is why 
> RFC 7180 was listed as an Informational reference while the many 
> references to RFC 7780 are mostly normative and it is listed as a 
> normative reference. I suggest just changing "[RFC7180]" to "RFC 7180"
> in the appendix so hopefully the nits checker won't notice it :-)
>
> See below.
>
>> Sue
>>
>> From: trill [mailto:trill-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of Susan Hares
>> Sent: Wednesday, August 10, 2016 3:18 PM
>> To: trill@ietf.org
>> Cc: 'Donald Eastlake'; draft-ietf-trill-rfc6439bis@ietf.org; 'Jon Hudson'
>> Subject: [trill] Shepherd's review Review of 
>> draft-ietf-trill-rfc6439bis-02.txt
>>
>> Status: Ready to publish
>> Concerns: None
>>
>> Editorial nits:
>>
>> Section 2.2.1 - paragraph 6 sentence starting with /should the VLANs 
>> - it would help if the sentence was broken into to sentences.
>
> I think the best think to do might be to parenthesis the "example" and 
> then to indent the remainder of the paragraph after the ":". See 
> attached for what the paragraph would then look like.
>
>> Section 4.0 - 4th paragraph - in the 1st numbered sub-paragraph - the 
>> sentence starting with /This is backward/
>>
>> Is "backward compatible" correct English.  My understanding is that 
>> it would "backwardly compatible" (adverb adjective-noun).
>
> I think "backward compatible" is a common computer term. I suppose it 
> is some sort of compound adjective. How about if it is hyphenated?
>
>> This sentence would also benefit from breaking it in 2.
>
> OK.
>
> Thanks,
> Donald
> ===============================
>  Donald E. Eastlake 3rd   +1-508-333-2270 (cell)
>  155 Beaver Street, Milford, MA 01757 USA  d3e3e3@gmail.com
>
>> Sue Hares

_______________________________________________
trill mailing list
trill@ietf.org
https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/trill