[trill] Shepherd's review Review of draft-ietf-trill-rfc6439bis-02.txt

"Susan Hares" <shares@ndzh.com> Wed, 10 August 2016 19:18 UTC

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Subject: [trill] Shepherd's review Review of draft-ietf-trill-rfc6439bis-02.txt
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Status: Ready to publish 

Concerns: None 

 

Editorial nits: 

 

Section 2.2.1 - paragraph 6 sentence starting with /should the VLANs - it
would help if the sentence was broken into to sentences. 

Section 4.0 - 4th paragraph - in the 1st numbered sub-paragraph - the
sentence starting with /This is backward/

 

Is "backward compatible" correct English.  My understanding is that it would
"backwardly compatible" (adverb adjective-noun). 

This sentence would also benefit from breaking it in 2. 

 

 

Sue Hares