Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-spring-srv6-network-programming-17

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From: "Pablo Camarillo (pcamaril)" <pcamaril@cisco.com>
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Mirja,

Many thanks for your prompt review. We will correct those nits in the next revision of the draft.

Cheers,
Pablo.

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Subject: Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-spring-srv6-network-programming-17

Reviewer: Mirja Kühlewind
Review result: Ready

This document has been reviewed as part of the transport area review team's ongoing effort to review key IETF documents. These comments were written primarily for the transport area directors, but are copied to the document's authors and WG to allow them to address any issues raised and also to the IETF discussion list for information.

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This review did not identify any transport-related issues.

Nits:
- maybe spell out PE on first occurrence in section 4.8.
- Also maybe spell out BUM in section 4.12 (as well as other abbreviation there). Also shouldn't it be s/BUM/BUM traffic/ ? - sec 4.13: s/multiple domains. it is one/multiple domains. It is one/ - Would be good to spell out PSP, USP and USD right at the beginning of section 4.16