Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions-05

"Ori Finkelman (IETF)" <ori.finkelman.ietf@gmail.com> Mon, 09 September 2019 18:17 UTC

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From: "Ori Finkelman (IETF)" <ori.finkelman.ietf@gmail.com>
Date: Mon, 09 Sep 2019 21:17:18 +0300
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To: Barry Leiba <barryleiba@computer.org>
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Subject: Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions-05
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Thank you Michael for your comments.
Regarding graphical represtnation, we are still considering that.
This document was intended to be a brief addition to the much elaborated
existing CDNI documents, in which the involved parties are defined and
there are graphical representations of all the relevant seuqneces.
Oringally, we felt that adding the same sequences in this document would be
a duplication and redundant.
Instead we have provided references to the relevant sections in other CDNI
documents.
In the next revision I have added more references.
However, since it seems that reviewers find this document incomplete, I am
now considering adding a drawing to make it clearer.

Please let us know what you think.

Thanks,
Ori

On Mon, Sep 9, 2019 at 8:57 PM Barry Leiba <barryleiba@computer.org> wrote:

> Thanks so much for the review, Michael.  I like your suggestions and
> hope the authors will incorporate them into the pending revised I-D,
> before I send the document to IESG Evaluation.
>
> Barry
>
> On Mon, Sep 9, 2019 at 1:51 PM Michael Tüxen via Datatracker
> <noreply@ietf.org> wrote:
> >
> > Reviewer: Michael Tüxen
> > Review result: Ready with Nits
> >
> > This document has been reviewed as part of the transport area review
> team's
> > ongoing effort to review key IETF documents. These comments were written
> > primarily for the transport area directors, but are copied to the
> document's
> > authors and WG to allow them to address any issues raised and also to
> the IETF
> > discussion list for information.
> >
> > When done at the time of IETF Last Call, the authors should consider this
> > review as part of the last-call comments they receive. Please always CC
> > tsv-art@ietf.org if you reply to or forward this review.
> >
> > I have not identified any transport related issues.
> >
> > To improve readability, you might want to
> > * resolve acronyms on first occurence like CDN, CDNI,...
> > * Remove section 1.1, since the introduced abbreviations are not used in
> the text.
> > * add a graphical representation of the involved nodes and the messages
> being exchanged between them
> >
> > Typos:
> > * Section 3: the uCDN provide a fallback -> the uCDN provides a fallback
> > * Section 6: Nir B.  Sopher -> Nir B. Sopher (no double space after
> period)
> > * Section 6: Kevin J.  Ma -> Kevin J. Ma (no double space after period)
> >
>

[Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-c… Michael Tüxen via Datatracker
Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ie… Barry Leiba
Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ie… Ori Finkelman (IETF)
Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ie… Ori Finkelman (IETF)
Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ie… Michael Tuexen
Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ie… Ori Finkelman (IETF)