[Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-spring-srv6-network-programming-17

Mirja Kühlewind via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Tue, 18 August 2020 17:18 UTC

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Reviewer: Mirja Kühlewind
Review result: Ready

This document has been reviewed as part of the transport area review team's
ongoing effort to review key IETF documents. These comments were written
primarily for the transport area directors, but are copied to the document's
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This review did not identify any transport-related issues.

Nits:
- maybe spell out PE on first occurrence in section 4.8.
- Also maybe spell out BUM in section 4.12 (as well as other abbreviation
there). Also shouldn't it be s/BUM/BUM traffic/ ? - sec 4.13: s/multiple
domains. it is one/multiple domains. It is one/ - Would be good to spell out
PSP, USP and USD right at the beginning of section 4.16