Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-opsawg-vpn-common-09

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To: Wesley Eddy <wes@mti-systems.com>, "tsv-art@ietf.org" <tsv-art@ietf.org>
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Hi Wes, 

Thank you for the (re)review :-)

Please see inline. 

Cheers,
Med

> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : Wesley Eddy via Datatracker [mailto:noreply@ietf.org]
> Envoyé : vendredi 30 juillet 2021 22:59
> À : tsv-art@ietf.org
> Cc : draft-ietf-opsawg-vpn-common.all@ietf.org; last-call@ietf.org;
> opsawg@ietf.org
> Objet : Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-opsawg-vpn-common-09
> 
> Reviewer: Wesley Eddy
> Review result: Ready with Issues
> 
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> 
> This document basically looks good to me, though I have a small
> number of
> comments:
> 
> (1) I think this comment impacts only the narrative and not the YANG
> model itself.  The list of possible underlay-transport values seems
> to be a mixture of expected types of encapsulations, but then a
> couple of things at the end that are signaling and not
> encapsulations per-se.  The last 2 entries in the list on page 6 are
> what seem out of place to me - RSVP and BGP.  I don't think it's
> quite correct to refer to these two as the underlay-transport.
> 

[Med] Good point. These are used to determine how the underlay is set. What about making this change: 

OLD: 
   A YANG grouping that defines the type of the underlay transport
   for a VPN service.

NEW:
   A YANG grouping that defines the type of the underlay transport
   for a VPN service or how that underlay is set.

> (2) This is a YANG model question, that I'm unsure of.  I want to
> make sure that in the match-type when match-flow is used that a
> combination of L3 and L4 attributes can be used.

[Med] Both L3 and L4 can be included given that these too are not cases of the same choice. An example that follows the model and includes both L3/L4 is shown below: 

{
  "id": "a-rule-id",
  "ipv6": {
    "destination-ipv6-network": "2001:db8::/32"
  },
  "udp": {
    "destination-port-range-or-operator": {
      "operator": "eq",
      "port": 53
    }
  }
}

  It appears like
> either L3 or L4 can be indicated, mutually exclusive, but I don't
> quite understand how it would then be possible to properly represent
> the combination of IP, transport protocol, and ports that identify a
> flow.  It seems like a list of criteria from both L3 and L4
> components is what's needed to express a flow, rather than a choice
> of L3 or L4.


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