[Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-lorawan-13

Ian Swett via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Wed, 04 November 2020 23:02 UTC

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Reviewer: Ian Swett
Review result: Ready with Nits

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This document looked to be in good shape, but I'm quite unfamiliar with SCHC,
so hopefully others who are have also reviewed this.

An overall comment is that this document could use more cross-refs to specific
sections of RFC8724

Some nits below:

Section 2

   o  SCHC gateway: It corresponds to the LoRaWAN Application Server.
      It manages translation between IPv6 network and the Network
      Gateway (LoRaWAN Network Server).

  Nit: "It corresponds to" seems unnecessary and isn't parallel with other
  definitions.  How about: "The LoRaWAN Application Server that manages ..."?

Section 4.3

   As SCHC defines its own acknowledgment mechanisms, SCHC does not
   require to use LoRaWAN Confirmed frames.

  This sentence is awkward.  Do you mean ", SCHC does not require the use of
  LoRaWAN Confirmed Frames".

  Also, it may be worth adding cross-references to the appropriate section of
  RFC8376 for all of these frame types?

Section 5.1
   A fragmented datagram with application payload transferred from
   device to Network Gateway, is called uplink fragmented datagram.  It

  "Is called an uplink fragmented datagram."?