[tsvwg] Roman Danyliw's Discuss on draft-ietf-tsvwg-rlc-fec-scheme-14: (with DISCUSS and COMMENT)

Roman Danyliw via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Wed, 29 May 2019 00:52 UTC

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DISCUSS:
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A few code nits for Section 3.6 so that the code compiles:
** To make the combination of this source code and that in
draft-ietf-tsvwg-tinymt32 compile requires that the directive “#include
<string.h>” be added (for the memset).

** The final return in Section 3.6 is missing a semicolon:
s/return 0/return 0;/


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COMMENT:
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(1) Section 3.5  Is there any guidance that needs to be provided on the value
of the seed to tinymt32_init?

(2) Section 3.6.  In the code comments for cc_nb, I recommend explicitly
stating: s/number of entries in the table/ number of entries in the cc_tab[]
table/

(3) Section 3.6.  Multiple C code fragments are used in the text.  Somewhere
the text should state that the examples are C code and made a reference to what
version -- consider C99 (ISO/IEC 9899:1999), C11 (ISO/IEC 9899:2011), C18
(ISO/IEC 9899:2018).

(4) Other References Nits
Section 1.  Please include a reference for FECFRAME on first introduction.
Section 1.1.  What is the reference for Raptor/RaptorQ?

(6) Editorial Nits
Abstract.  No references are permitted in the abstract
Section 1.1.  Multiple Typos.  s/either a end-/either an end-/g
Section 1.2.  Extra space. s/constraints) ./constraints)./
Section 1.4.  Multiple Typos.  s/signalling/signaling/g
Section 6.2.  Typo.  s/Section Section 3.6/Section 3.6/