[tsvwg] Re draft-kuhn-tsvwg-careful-resume-00

["Border, John" <[e-mail]>]

    I think we need little bit of discussion around the fact that RTT and BB can also vary during a connection, especially a long-lived connection, not just from one connection to the next.  Therefore, the saved RTT and BB values should be the RTT and BB near the end of the connection rather than earlier in the connection.  This might require that the values be save (and possibly sent in a BDP_FRAME) multiple times as things change.

    In Section 3, when I got to the Retreat Phase description, I paused because it seemed like more is needed.  I later found that more in Section 4.5.  I think it would be helpful, for all of the phases, to put pointers to the sections which have more discussion about them.  (Or maybe a blanket pointer to Section 4 for more details at the front of Section 3.)

    Re Section 4.4 and Section 4.4.1...  I think half of the capacity should be a good choice (although I am still thinking about it).  (Might need to be variable based upon some to be defined criteria.)  But it probably needs to take into account the capacity when compared to the IW.


John



Minor comments and nits...

In the second sentence of the third paragraph of the Abstract...  "allowing then to" should be "allowing them to".

In the first sentence of the Introduction...  "there" should be "their".

Re Section 1.2...
In the second sentence, delete the duplicate "could".
Add "is different" to the first clause of Example 1.

In the first sentence of Section 1.3...  "secion" should be "section".

In Section 1.3.1...  Mention that this is a GEO satellite example.  Might be useful to explicitly state that the difference is the longer slow start time without the method.

Re Section 3...
In the first sentence, remove the first occurrence of the word "through" and change "uit" to "it".
In the last sentence for the Observe Phase description, delete the word "are".
In the Reconnaissance Phase description, "currnetly" should be "currently" and "iniial" should be "initial".  And, the sentence "The sender is send iniial [sic] data, limited by the Initial Window." needs rephrasing.
In the second sentence of the Unvalidated Phase description, "This phase a rate..." should be "This phase allows a rate..." (or something like that).
In the third sentence of the Retreat Phase description, "re-initialised" should be "re-initialise".

In the title of Section 4.1, "Determing" should be "Determining".

In the first sentence of Section 4.3, "irelevant" should be "irrelevant".

In the third bullet of Section A.1, "it should an interface..." should be "it should include an interface...".  Except, the last statement of the third point about what the sender should ensure re the Endpoint Token indicates the "should" should be a "must".