Re: [v6ops] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-v6ops-cidr-prefix-02: (with COMMENT)

David Farmer <farmer@umn.edu> Wed, 27 May 2015 06:00 UTC

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Subject: Re: [v6ops] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-v6ops-cidr-prefix-02: (with COMMENT)
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On 5/26/15 03:01 , mohamed.boucadair@orange.com wrote:
> Dear Barry,
>
> Many thanks for the careful review.
>
> An updated version is available online. A diff is available at: https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url1=draft-ietf-v6ops-cidr-prefix-02&url2=draft-ietf-v6ops-cidr-prefix-03
>
> Cheers,
> Med

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>> -- Section 2 --
>> In the second paragraph, I note that too many attributive nouns put
>> together make for awkwardness and confusion.  I suggest changing
>> "Forwarding decision-making processes" to "Decision-making processes for
>> forwarding", so it's clear that "forwarding" is a gerund (noun), not a
>> participle (verb).

This same phrase is at the end of the first sentence of the first 
paragraph in the introduction as well, maybe change it there too.

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