Re: [xrblock] chair review of https://www.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-xrblock-independent-burst-gap-discard-00.txt

Varun Singh <vsingh.ietf@gmail.com> Mon, 21 March 2016 16:52 UTC

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From: Varun Singh <vsingh.ietf@gmail.com>
Date: Mon, 21 Mar 2016 18:51:40 +0200
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Subject: Re: [xrblock] chair review of https://www.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-xrblock-independent-burst-gap-discard-00.txt
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Hi Dan,


Thanks for the feedback, I incorporated all the changes.

On Tue, Jan 5, 2016 at 7:28 PM, Romascanu, Dan (Dan) <dromasca@avaya.com> wrote:
> Hi,
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> Please find below my WG chair review of
> https://www.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-xrblock-independent-burst-gap-discard-00.txt.
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> I believe this document is in good shape, but a few more edits are needed:
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> 1.       [RFC7003] should really be a Normative Reference. Tis future RFC
> will be used (also) in deployment, and it would be difficult for developers
> and operators to make sense what metrics need to be used in different cases
> from the two documents without reading them both. Also, in the Appendix,
> direct references are being made to [RFC7003].
>

Fixed.


> 2.       The first paragraph in section 1.1 needs some rewriting. The first
> sentence should be broken in two. In the second sentence s/and number of
> packets discarded/and the number of packets discarded/

Fixed.

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> 3.       Also in section 1.1, paragraph 4: s/The variation in the number of
> packet discard in a burst/ The variation in the number of packet discards in
> a burst/
>

Fixed

> 4.       In section 3.3 in two instances: s/divide with/divide by/
>

Fixed.

> 5.       In Section 6.3 – the contact information should be ‘ART Area
> Directors <art-ads@tools.ietf.org
>

Done.

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> Thanks and Regards,
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> Dan
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