Re: [xrblock] AD evaluation: draft-ietf-xrblock-rtcp-xr-video-lc-05

"Huangyihong (Rachel)" <rachel.huang@huawei.com> Mon, 23 November 2015 09:16 UTC

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From: "Huangyihong (Rachel)" <rachel.huang@huawei.com>
To: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>, "xrblock@ietf.org" <xrblock@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [xrblock] AD evaluation: draft-ietf-xrblock-rtcp-xr-video-lc-05
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Hi Alissa,

Thank you for the comments. Will fix them in the next version.

BR,
Rachel

From: xrblock [mailto:xrblock-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of Alissa Cooper
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Subject: [xrblock] AD evaluation: draft-ietf-xrblock-rtcp-xr-video-lc-05

I have reviewed this document in preparation for IETF LC. I believe the document is in good shape and is ready for LC. I’ve noted below some nits that should be fixed together with any LC comments received.

Thanks,
Alissa

== Sec 1.3 ==

"These metrics are applicable to video applications the video
   component of Audio/Video applications using RTP and applying packet
   loss concealment mechanisms which are incorporated into the receiving
   endpoint to mitigate the impact of network impairments on QoE."

There is a grammar problem with this sentence. Please fix.

s/Set Top Boxes/set top boxes/

== Sec 3 ==

s/as follow/as follows/

s/information.There/information. There/

s/methods slightly different/methods to be slightly different/

s/Thus, In this document/Thus, in this document/

== Sec 5.2 ==

s/unilateral parameter/unilateral parameters/

== Sec 6 ==

OLD
Implementers
   SHOULD consider the guidance in [RFC7202] for using appropriate
   security mechanisms, i.e., where security is a concern, the
   implementation SHOULD apply encryption and authentication to the
   report block.

NEW
Implementers
   should consider the guidance in [RFC7202] for using appropriate
   security mechanisms. Where security is a concern, the
   implementation SHOULD apply encryption and authentication to the
   report block.

(No need for normative directives about how to read other specs.)

== Sec 7.3 ==

OLD
RAI Area Directors

   rai-ads@tools.ietf.org<mailto:rai-ads@tools.ietf.org>

NEW
ART Area Directors

   art-ads@tools.ietf.org<mailto:art-ads@tools.ietf.org>