Re: [yang-doctors] [Last-Call] Yangdoctors last call review of draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring-data-model-06
"Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong" <jaehoon.paul@gmail.com> Thu, 29 April 2021 14:50 UTC
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Date: Thu, 29 Apr 2021 23:49:41 +0900
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Cc: Andy Bierman <andy@yumaworks.com>, Linda Dunbar <linda.dunbar@futurewei.com>, Yoav Nir <ynir.ietf@gmail.com>, draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring-data-model.all@ietf.org, "i2nsf@ietf.org" <i2nsf@ietf.org>, Last Call <last-call@ietf.org>, YANG Doctors <yang-doctors@ietf.org>, skku-iotlab-members <skku-iotlab-members@googlegroups.com>, Patrick Lingga <patricklink888@gmail.com>, "Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong" <jaehoon.paul@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: [yang-doctors] [Last-Call] Yangdoctors last call review of draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring-data-model-06
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Hi Tom, Patrick and I have addressed all your comments below with the following revision. https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring-data-model-08 I attach our revision letter. Thanks. Best Regards, Paul On Mon, Apr 12, 2021 at 6:59 PM tom petch <daedulus@btconnect.com> wrote: > Paul > > Some admin comments on -07; I think that you need to: > > - change the title in YANG revision reference > > - add to the I-D references > RFC959 > RFC8632 > > - shorten lines. There is a limit to line length in RFC as per the Style > Guide. This is exceeded in the YANG where some of the path statements > take it over 80 while some of the examples are over 100. > > - add a reference for the import of > ietf-i2nsf-policy-rule-for-nsf > > HTH > > Tom Petcb > > On 01/04/2021 03:09, Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong wrote: > > Hi Andy, Linda, and Yoav, > > Patrick and I have addressed all the comments from Andy. > > Here is the revised draft -07: > > > https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring-data-model-07 > > > > I attach a revision letter to explain how we addressed the comments. > > > > There are the major updates in this revision as follows: > > --- > > o This version is revised according to the comments of Andy Bierman > > who is a YANG doctor. > > > > o This version updates its title as "I2NSF NSF Monitoring Interface > > YANG Data Model". It clarifies the NSF Monitoring Interface to > > deliver NSF monitoring data to an NSF data collector (e.g., > > Security Controller and NSF data analyzer). > > > > o This version adds an attack destination IP address for DDoS-attack > > event to provide an NSF data collector with more information > about the > > destination of DDoS-attack packets. > > > > o This version supports a notification for monitoring traffic flows > > to detect the source and destination (as a victim) of security > attacks > > such as DDoS attack. > > --- > > If you have questions and comments, please let me know. > > > > Thanks. > > > > Best Regards, > > Paul > > > > > > On Wed, Mar 24, 2021 at 3:34 AM Andy Bierman via Datatracker < > > noreply@ietf.org> wrote: >
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