[6lo] Shepherd review of draft-ietf-6lo-minimal-fragment-02

"Carles Gomez Montenegro" <carlesgo@entel.upc.edu> Fri, 19 July 2019 10:26 UTC

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Date: Fri, 19 Jul 2019 12:26:04 +0200
From: "Carles Gomez Montenegro" <carlesgo@entel.upc.edu>
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Subject: [6lo] Shepherd review of draft-ietf-6lo-minimal-fragment-02
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Dear authors,

First of all, thanks for your work.

As the shepherd for draft-ietf-6lo-minimal-fragment-02, I have reviewed
the document, and have the following comments:

- "LLN" is used in the title and in the abstract, but the actual body of
the document uses the term "6LoWPAN" (or "6Lo"), which in fact is more
specific. Should "LLN" be replaced with "6LoWPAN" (or "6Lo")?  (I tend to
think so...)

- The document uses the term "minimal" also in the title and in the
abstract, but the document does not explicitly define how the concept of
"minimal" needs to be understood. Furthermore, "minimal" is not present in
the body of the document. Perhaps some clarification on the concept of
"minimal" (e.g. in the Introduction) might help the reader.

- The idnits tool reports a few issues that should be taken care of (at
least, the first and the last ones). Please find them below for your
convenience:

  ** The abstract seems to contain references
     ([I-D.ietf-lwig-6lowpan-virtual-reassembly]), which it shouldn't.
     Please replace those with straight textual mentions of the documents in
     question.
  -- The document date (June 24, 2019) is 24 days in the past.  Is this
     intentional?
  -- Found something which looks like a code comment -- if you have code
     sections in the document, please surround them with '<CODE BEGINS>' and
     '<CODE ENDS>' lines.
  == Unused Reference: 'BOOK' is defined on line 266, but no explicit
     reference was found in the text
     Summary: 1 error (**), 0 flaws (~~), 1 warning (==), 2 comments (--).

I have no further comments.

Thanks!

Carles