Re: [CCAMP] Fw: New Version Notification for draft-zheng-ccamp-client-signal-yang-05.txt
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From: tom petch <ietfc@btconnect.com>
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Subject: Re: [CCAMP] Fw: New Version Notification for draft-zheng-ccamp-client-signal-yang-05.txt
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I see draft-zheng-ccamp-client-signal-yang-06 and it is moving forward. You need YANG version statement in every module. It defaults to 1 and in that version, you cannot have a reference in an import which is why I suspect you have made //reference "RFC 6991 - Common YANG Data Types"; into a comment; add version 1.1 and the statement will be valid as reference "RFC 6991 - Common YANG Data Types"; reference "RFC XXXX - This Document."; will not look so good when the YANG module is extracted from the RFC. I suggest reference "RFC XXXX - A YANG Data Model for Transport Network Client Signals"; with a note to the RFC Editor somewhere at the start asking them to replace XXXX with the number assigned to the RFC; you will see such a request in almost all YANG I-D. Just the one request is fine for all the XXXX But reference "RFC XXXX - Traffic Engineering Common YANG Types"; may confuse the RFC Editor. I suggest reference "RFC YYYY - Traffic Engineering Common YANG Types"; with a note up from asking the RFC Editor to replace YYYY with the number assigned to [I-D.ietf-teas-yang-te-types] and if you need to reference further I-D, then RFC ZZZZ etc Security Considerations are still not the current text. You have 'weather' where I think 'whether' is intended There are several lines too long to fit in an RFC IANA Considerations should reference RFC6020 and not RFC 7950 NMDA needs a mention, support or lack thereof. grouping client-svc-instance_config { is a mix of hyphen and underscore; YANG allows this but discourages it. All hyphen is preferred. / "Configuraiton parameters for client services."; / "Configuration parameters for client services."; / Tom Petch ----- Original Message ----- From: "tom petch" <ietfc@btconnect.com> To: "Zhenghaomian (Zhenghaomian, Optical Technology Research Dept)" <zhenghaomian@huawei.com>; <ccamp@ietf.org> Sent: Saturday, March 09, 2019 12:51 PM > ----- Original Message ----- > From: "Zhenghaomian (Zhenghaomian, Optical Technology Research Dept)" > <zhenghaomian@huawei.com> > Sent: Friday, March 08, 2019 5:49 AM > > > Dear Ccampers, > > > > We have updated this work. Compared with -03, there are the following > changes: > > > > - Integrating this work with two more experts (Thanks Francesco and > Anton!) > > - Indicating necessity of the models, and specify their relationship > with existing models, in section 3; > > - Update the modules, ietf-trans-client-service, ietf-eth-tran-service > and ietf-eth-tran-types with new attributes, e.g., end-point and PW > segment; > > - For the resilience information and pm-config, there is still pending > work to be done, place holders have been put for future work. > > > > The authors believe this work is stable in working scope and > functionality, and request for a WG adoption. Please feel free to review > and leave your comments to us. Thank you. > > Since you ask... > > The YANG needs some more work, mostly of an administrative kind. > > Abstract/Introduction should say whether or not NMDA is supported. > > good practice is to have a section in the body of the I-D which lists > the prefixes used in a module and where they can be found e.g. > +---------+------------------------------+-----------------+ > | Prefix | YANG module | Reference | > +---------+------------------------------+-----------------+ > | l1csm | ietf-l1cms | [RFC XXXX] | > | yang | ietf-yang-types | [RFC6991] | > +---------+------------------------------+-----------------+ > > good practice is to have a section just before each YANG module listing > the documents that it imports from and references > e.g. > This module imports typedefs and modules from [RFC6991], [RFC8343] > and [RFC7224], and it references [TR102311], [EN302217-1], > [EN301129], and [G.826]. > > YANG modules must have a copyright statement > > YANG modules must say where they come from e.g. > reference "RFC XXXX: A YANG Data Model for Transport Network Client > Signals"; > > References in a YANG module must appear in the references of the I-D > e.g. > 802.1ad > MEF 10 > RFC 2697 > RFC 2698 > RFC 4115 > > YANG import statements need a reference e.g. > import ietf-routing-types { > prefix "rt-types"; > reference "RFC 8294 - Common YANG Data Types for the > Routing Area"; } > > 'Security Considerations' are not the current text > > Some line lengths are too long for an RFC > > IANA Considerations ! > > All of which makes the I-D easier to follow, easier to assess for > adoption (or not:-) > > Tom Petch > > > BTW, please forget about -04 of this work as the model inside was not > correct (my apologize...). > > > > Best wishes, > > Haomian (On behalf of all the authors & contributors) > > > > -----邮件原件----- > > 发件人: internet-drafts@ietf.org [mailto:internet-drafts@ietf.org] > > 发送时间: 2019年3月8日 13:02 > > 收件人: Xufeng Liu <xufeng.liu.ietf@gmail.com>; Zhenghaomian > (Zhenghaomian, Optical Technology Research Dept) > <zhenghaomian@huawei.com>; Yunbin Xu <xuyunbin@ritt.cn>; Francesco > Lazzeri <francesco.lazzeri@ericsson.com>; Anton Snitser > <antons@sedonasys.com>; Giuseppe Fioccola > <giuseppe.fioccola@huawei.com>; Aihuaguo (Aihua Guo, CRC) > <aihuaguo@huawei.com>; Italo Busi <Italo.Busi@huawei.com>; Yang Zhao > <zhaoyangyjy@chinamobile.com> > > 主题: New Version Notification for > draft-zheng-ccamp-client-signal-yang-05.txt > > > > > > A new version of I-D, draft-zheng-ccamp-client-signal-yang-05.txt > > has been successfully submitted by Haomian Zheng and posted to the > IETF repository. > > > > Name: draft-zheng-ccamp-client-signal-yang > > Revision: 05 > > Title: A YANG Data Model for Transport Network Client Signals > > Document date: 2019-03-08 > > Group: Individual Submission > > Pages: 46 > > URL: > https://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-zheng-ccamp-client-signal-yan > g-05.txt > > Status: > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-zheng-ccamp-client-signal-yang/ > > Htmlized: > https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-zheng-ccamp-client-signal-yang-05 > > Htmlized: > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-zheng-ccamp-client-signal-ya > ng > > Diff: > https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-zheng-ccamp-client-signal-yang-0 > 5 > > > > Abstract: > > A transport network is a server-layer network to provide > connectivity > > services to its client. The topology and tunnel information in the > > transport layer has already been defined by generic Traffic- > > engineered models and technology-specific models (e.g., OTN, WSON). > > However, how the client signals are accessing to the network has > not > > been described. These information is necessary to both client and > > provider. > > > > This draft describes how the client signals are carried over > > transport network and defines YANG data models which are required > > during configuration procedure. More specifically, several client > > signal (of transport network) models including ETH, STM-n, FC and > so > > on, are defined in this draft. > > > > > > > > > > Please note that it may take a couple of minutes from the time of > submission until the htmlized version and diff are available at > tools.ietf.org. > > > > The IETF Secretariat > > > > _______________________________________________ > > CCAMP mailing list > > CCAMP@ietf.org > > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ccamp > > > > _______________________________________________ > CCAMP mailing list > CCAMP@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ccamp >
- [CCAMP] Fw: New Version Notification for draft-zh… Zhenghaomian (Zhenghaomian, Optical Technology Research Dept)
- Re: [CCAMP] Fw: New Version Notification for draf… tom petch
- Re: [CCAMP] Fw: New Version Notification for draf… tom petch