[Dots] comments for this document as contributor://答复: I-D Action: draft-ietf-dots-server-discovery-03.txt

"Xialiang (Frank, Network Standard & Patent Dept)" <frank.xialiang@huawei.com> Fri, 21 June 2019 08:24 UTC

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From: "Xialiang (Frank, Network Standard & Patent Dept)" <frank.xialiang@huawei.com>
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Hi authors,
I have several comments as contributor below:

1. nits
    Section 1: 
        s/The discovery methods can also used by a DOTS server to locate.../ The discovery methods can also be used by a DOTS server to locate.../
        s/ [I-D.ietf-netconf-zerotouch]/[RFC8527]/
    title section 5: s/DHCP Options for DOTS/ DHCP Options for DOTS Agent Discovery/
    section 5.1.1: s/ The DHCPv6 DOTS option/ The DHCPv6 DOTS Reference Identifier option/
    section 5.1.2: s/ The DHCPv6 DOTS option/ The DHCPv6 DOTS Address option/
    section 5.2.1: s/ The DHCPv4 DOTS option/ The DHCPv4 DOTS Reference Identifier option/
    section 5.2.2: s/ The DHCPv4 DOTS option/ The DHCPv4 DOTS Address option/

2. comments:
    1) In section 1, I don't see any relation of happy eyeball with your proposed dots agent discovery mechanism, it not so necessary to mention it;
    2) In section 4, " DOTS clients will prefer information received from the discovery methods in the order listed. ": in what kind of order?
    3) For section 5.1.3 and section 5.2.3, there seems to be some confusions and conflictions about these points: what is the goal of returning more than one instance of OPTION_V6_DOTS if must only use the first instance? Does one DOTS Reference Identifier Option include one or multiple dots-agent-name?
    4) In section 5.2.1, will figure 5 be more appropriate as figure 3?
    5) For section 6--DNS service resolution , this section does not clarify the process and details about how to get DOTS agent IP based on the retrieved DOTS agent name?
    6) Section 7 (DNS-SD) is very short, can you clarify briefly what is the essential difference between this mechanism and previous DNS service resolution mechanism?
    7) Is it possible to list the pro & con, or at least the related constraints for each discovery mechanisms at the end of the document? I think it's useful for reader in the real implementation.

Thanks!

B.R.
Frank


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主题: Re: [Dots] I-D Action: draft-ietf-dots-server-discovery-03.txt

Hi all, 

The main change in this version is to integrate call-home considerations. 

We do think this version is stable enough for a WGLC. 

Cheers,
Med

> -----Message d'origine-----
> De : I-D-Announce [mailto:i-d-announce-bounces@ietf.org] De la part de 
> internet-drafts@ietf.org Envoyé : vendredi 31 mai 2019 11:10 À : 
> i-d-announce@ietf.org Cc : dots@ietf.org Objet : I-D Action: 
> draft-ietf-dots-server-discovery-03.txt
> 
> 
> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts 
> directories.
> This draft is a work item of the DDoS Open Threat Signaling WG of the 
> IETF.
> 
>         Title           : Distributed-Denial-of-Service Open Threat
> Signaling (DOTS) Server Discovery
>         Authors         : Mohamed Boucadair
>                           Tirumaleswar Reddy
> 	Filename        : draft-ietf-dots-server-discovery-03.txt
> 	Pages           : 22
> 	Date            : 2019-05-31
> 
> Abstract:
>    It may not be possible for a network to determine the cause for an
>    attack, but instead just realize that some resources seem to be under
>    attack.  To fill that gap, Distributed-Denial-of-Service Open Threat
>    Signaling (DOTS) allows a network to inform a DOTS server that it is
>    under a potential attack so that appropriate mitigation actions are
>    undertaken.
> 
>    This document specifies mechanisms to configure DOTS clients with
>    DOTS servers.  The discovery procedure also covers the DOTS Signal
>    Channel Call Home.
> 
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